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 This week we have a picture of a street at night.
You have 100 words to produce a creative piece of writing. Use your imaginations! Just make sure what you write makes sense to your readers.
32 Comments
Jessica
30/1/2015 01:44:43 am
As I walked out into the dark streets the lights were so bright that I had to cover my eyes! I was meeting my friend at the train station to go to London for a school trip, I was especially excited about having my best friend as a room mate. My teacher, Mrs sedgefield, warned us about the snow and the ice as we left school. Sadie -my best friend -was as exited as me!
Mr Turner
5/2/2015 10:46:51 pm
Super work Jessica! You have included a clause and have used a wide range of punctuation.
bethany!
30/1/2015 06:58:43 pm
A Street At Night:By Bethany O'neil
Mr Turner
5/2/2015 10:48:23 pm
I don't think I will venture down the street Bethany! Well done, you have interested the reader. Try and add commas to take short breaths within your writing.
Guy
30/1/2015 11:47:54 pm
It's 2015 and my name is Abby. I'm going to tell you the whole story behind the haunted dark,twisted and busy road. So here we go,back in 1915 there was a girl called Tracy, she had caring and loving parents, a huge house she even had the biggest room! Always she wanted more but her parents refused so one grim,cold and dark night she jumped out the small window. She ran and ran and stopped to get her breath back on the road and before she knew it there was a car flying and ran her over. And her spirit haunts the road to this day.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:32:55 pm
Well done Guy, you have written an interesting, imaginative idea for a story. Could we have added an ellipsis at the end to help build tension/ mystery surrounding the character?
Josh!
31/1/2015 05:43:31 pm
On Thursday night I was biking up to my grandma's house. Suddenly a 4 by 4 rushed straight past me I'm not sure if it was a unmarked police officer and car but I knew something was fishy something wasn't right could it be because of a bank robbery and the suspect fled the scene. I started biking very fast until I came of the main road into a street were all was silent apart from the old couples snoring. The hummer suddenly sped past me again but this time with 3 unmarked police cars chasing after it .In about 30 seconds I was at my Grandma's house soon after the 6 police officers arrested the 3 croooks.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:34:37 pm
An interesting idea Josh. I like how you have written this as a recount. Could we have added punctuation to help build the drama?
Kayleigh
31/1/2015 05:49:08 pm
So Daffodil and Red wandered past shops, pubs and Jacks waterfront, a diner. In no time they were at 52 crown street.
Ethan
31/1/2015 07:39:15 pm
On a stormy night it was dull, it felt like it was deserted but then I thought. If it was deserted why are the lights on in the houses but of curse people would be in side getting cosy and worm. But there is lights on in side why are there out side it gust dusent make any sense.Unles they need the lights on a night to see were they are going.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:35:19 pm
A good effort Ethan
Curious Sadie
31/1/2015 07:41:01 pm
What a cold rainy day it has been! There has been thunder, lightning and non-stop rain. To me it seems like there is going to be a huge storm or maybe even a miniature hurricane, which will likely last for about 10 minutes or so. I was just about to go to bed and watch a film until my Mam and Dad entered my room to tell me that we were going on a late night walk in the awful weather. I really didn’t want to go so I faked a tummy ache but they still forced me to go.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:35:47 pm
Well done Sadie
cobi
31/1/2015 11:15:21 pm
This photo could be anywhere in the world but in my opinion ,and I wont be the only one I think it is England ,because it looks cold, wet and miserable.That's why I think it is in England. This photo looks like it has been taken in autumn. This autumn evening looks very late at night because it isn't busy there is only one car on the picture and the car is only parked I wonder why someone would take a photo of this strange street but we wont know or will we? This photo is weird and wonderful
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:37:04 pm
An interesting spin on the challenge Cobi. You have given your opinion of what it could be. I like how you have included a rhetorical question.
Kate
1/2/2015 12:11:00 am
It was an early afternoon! It was 13:45. As it was snowing over at Spennymoor. When Kate asked if she and friends could go to Spennymoor? Her mum said yes. She phoned all her friends, but they all had to come back on Monday and find a hotel, Kate suggested premier inn but her other friends said Travelodge so we went. When Kate had her key she went to her door. Did she like it? Yes. It was lovely. she was amazed! She looked at her friends. It is was gorgeous said Madeleine!
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:38:39 pm
Well done Kate. Think carefully where you are placing your punctuation. Also, could you have added any speech marks?
Luke.p
1/2/2015 03:08:10 am
One night in a dark gloomy place where everybody was in bed it looked kind of scary.There was not even one single sound not even a mouse everyone was tucked up inbed. The street lights were very old because you could tell because they were very yellowey and dim, not one of the new types of lights which are blue/white. It was really dark and gloomy infact it looked like it was deserted. It looked like a housing estate in Bishop Auckland and it has a crossing in the middle for pedestrians to cross. It was definately in winter as it looks a cold and wet night. Im was pleased to be tucked up in my warm bed.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:39:29 pm
Well done Luke!
Katie
1/2/2015 03:11:30 am
It was a gloomy,wet and dark when we unloaded our furniture at our new house.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:40:07 pm
Fabulous work Katie. You have included speech marks and added clauses within your writing.
Beau
2/2/2015 03:40:45 am
It was the beginning of my sorrowful years, the18th October when my daughter went missing. Only my husband and I knew where she had gone, down down through the clouds what us immortals called the human lands. It was her first birthday, she had learnt to walk and talk. Every morning she would look down and say to me "what's down there?" We would always answer with the same 9 words "for me to know and you to find out." One day she did find out she was looking through the clouds and fell down down. So now at 12:00am I appear under that street light on the corner to find her, so if you ever see this little brown haired cute little girl who doesn't look human please leave her under this street light a 11:57pm for me to collect her.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:40:23 pm
Good effort Beau.
Henry
3/2/2015 03:17:30 am
I woke up from my deep sleep and I was on the floor. There was a big bang and it was coming from outside. I peeked through a small gap in the curtains an saw the awfull flooded street. Rain poring from the dark spooky clouds! I guessed it was a thunder storm because it always floods in the street that I live in because my house lives down the bottom of a hill so it is always floods. Luckily I fished out a umbrella out from under my bed and sneaked down stairs and out the front door and went down some really cool rapids in my umbrella and when I got back my mam told me off because I was really soaked through to my bones!
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:41:08 pm
Well done Henry. I like how you have started to use a range of openers within your writing.
happy Daniel
3/2/2015 11:52:23 pm
It was a dark night, and i was walking down the street, and when I was wondering what I should definitely do and where we should go to the next couple of days ago,I thought Portugal and I am looking forward to going to Portugal i hope it is verry hot but then like the night before but a bit different i saw a dog and it was all alone and it was sniffing all around so i tryed to recenise the dog but i couldent recenise it and i knew that it was nialls dog so i returned it.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:41:57 pm
A good attempt Daniel. You need to make sure you add full stops within your writing or it becomes very difficult to read at once.
evie-mae
7/2/2015 04:22:17 pm
One night,far away from escomb,was a wicked,haunted and ancient lamp that a girl called Sophie had to live next to back in the old days. She never belived that it was haunted untill...The sun went down and the moon and the stars showed there faces.Sophie was eating a samwich that a old man gave to her,and then as the lamp in the dark howling night,leaning forward without making a sound and...
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:43:22 pm
Well done Evie-Mae. You have included commas to denote a clause.
l
7/2/2015 04:22:58 pm
hope
Matthew
10/2/2015 02:17:45 am
n the middle of the night there stood a ghostly traffic island the island moves to confuse people in the morning.After the dark night sky had disappeared the bright sun rose to the light blue sky,which was full of clouds.That day someone was crossing the road when they got near the middle they noticed that the traffic island wasn't there and a car was coming at hundred miles per hour so John ran across the rest of the road to avoid the car that was coming.After john had been to school on the way home john noticed that the traffic island was there so john called it ghost island.
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 03:43:58 pm
Good work Matthew. Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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