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100 word challenge #8

23/10/2015

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This week we are back to part of a sentence for this week. Remember the prompt can go anywhere in your work BUT it must make sense and be the prompt as it is written. It is:
…it felt like..
Before you start writing think of all the things you can touch & how they feel. What fabulous words can you think of to describe what you are experiencing. It might be an idea to close your eyes before you start and try touching a few things but make sure they are not harmful!
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Liam M
23/10/2015 10:39:13 am

On 10th October I was going to Paris I had to be at the airport for 9.00am as we had to wait for 1 hour for the plane. We got on the plane and we sat in the first row of seats. When we took off it felt like I was a bird in the sky. Suddenly the alarm went off and there was smoke but we didn’t crash. The pilots had to turn the plane around 2 times and it eventually took 7 hours to reach Paris. In Paris I went to the Eiffel tower which is very big!!!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:28:52 am

Well done Liam. I like the use of the challenge words within your writing. Think about adding commas to denote a clause next time.

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Lucy.Brierley
24/10/2015 07:16:04 am

HAPPY HALOWEEN! Sophie and her friends were going trick or treating, along the lane. There was a witch, ghost, Frankenstein and a zombie-cheerleader. As they strolled down the lane phoebe shuffled into this rather disturbing creepy looking house patio."what... Why are you going in there?, its been said that some creepy things happened In this spooky house!" Sophie's friends backed away slowly and steadily trying to make it not as noticeable. A cold shiver ran down Layla's back. "What was that, IT FELT LIKE a spider crawling down my back."
"I HATE spiders!" Grumbled phoebe.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:29:42 am

I love it! Well done Lucy. Well done for including a hyphen. I know we have been focusing on this recently.

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kate
25/10/2015 01:32:17 am

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One summer, a man called John, grew a carrot. Months later, he decided to harvest It, but after he did that he saw that it was HUGE! It was the size of him and he was six foot. Seasons went by and the carrot was fresh in the freezer. John thought no-one would ever believe him that he had an enormous carrot so he chose to eat it. Suddenly, post came through the door, it read: “Dear john, you are invited to the harvest festival.” He took the offer and won with his carrot. “IT FELT LIKE victory,” HE SAID.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:45:19 am

Good work Kate. You have included the challenge words within your writing.

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Ethan Stokes
25/10/2015 08:21:00 am

As I crept inside what looked like an abandoned old house in the dead of night, a huge lighting strike struck the forest surrounding me. I rushed inside as fast as I could but then I ran into SOMETHING... it felt like a furry coat. More lighting was striking the forest and someone was outside with a torch shining it around. Eventually the door handle was turning and soon the door opened, in walked a disgruntled man. Before long he was waving his arms around in a childish way and shouting GET OUT OF MY HOUSE, GET OUT OF MY HOUSE!!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:30:20 am

Good work Ethan. You have used and ellipsis within your work and commas to denote a clause.

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Daniel
26/10/2015 02:47:24 am

One dark night, two little kids wear trick or treating at a haunted house. Suddenly out of no where a bloody knife drifts across the kids neck. As they nock on the door a small figure

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Daniel
28/10/2015 03:17:29 am

One dark misty night, everyone was in bed. Suddenly, BANG! An explosion of fire burst into the air but nobody was in sight. Then it happened again, still nothing. Frantically someone called the police. Then all of a sudden the police arrived at the scene. As the officer bellowed “battle stations! "everyone scrambled to their houses for safety. The police force started pulling the trigger on their guns. They eventually caught the villain. IT FELT LIKE he had a knife in his pocket. The chief disarmed him as soon as possible. Then the firemen arrived to put out the fire and save the day.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:31:24 am

Good work Daniel. I love the opener 'Frantically'. This is an interesting story.

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Tilly R
29/10/2015 09:08:16 am

One night, I went to my best friends Halloween party. I was dressed up as a scary zombie school girl and my make-up was amazing. Then I went to a party and I had a hotdogs. As I was eating my hotdog my best friend scared me and she dumped water over my head and it felt like it was poring down with rain in the house. After I had the scare of my life we went Trick or Treating. I went to loads of different houses with my friends. We all got money but we mostly got treats from people.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:32:05 am

A good effort Tilly. You have completed the challenge including all of the words. Try to use a wider range of punctuation next time.

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ruby o
29/10/2015 10:38:15 am

I remember going to the sea side on a family day out and my cousin Archie came with me.
I also remember plodding in the sea and the rippling Icy cold water slivered in between my toes. As we came out of the icy cold water the soggy sand stuck on to the end of my wet feet. It felt like i was put in to a Icy cold room and then coming out in to hot sun.
My mam started to wipe my feet and it felt like shy was rubbing sharp glass between my toes.
ICE CREAM TIME!!!!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:32:48 am

Well done Ruby. You have described feelings within your writing. Try to include the use of a comma next time.

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Connor
30/10/2015 04:30:00 am

At the weekend I went to Rof 59 with my cousins ,Ben, Jacob, Lewis , Tom, Alex and Connie. The venue was opened originally in 1941 for the war.
In the main room there were over 70 trampolines which went over a massive area and up the walls.
The trampolines were amazing when you jumped on the trampoline , It Felt Like , I was flying like a aeroplane high in the sky. We all went for a drink of pop and we got to keep our orange trampoline socks , I would love to go back very soon as we all had an amazing time at Rof 59.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:33:34 am

An interesting story Connor. I'm pleased to see you using the comma within your writing.

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Amelia
31/10/2015 07:37:51 am

Have you ever been on an extiting ride? Well I have. Last Summer my family and I went to Disneyland Paris,we enjoyed going on the rides and seeing all the disney characters. On the second day my dad persuaded us all to go on a Star Wars simulator ( He's a massive Star Wars fan, he thinks he's a jedi knight!!.)
I screamed so loud that nearly everyone in the park could hear me.On the ride it shook you around and it was incredibly fast,IT FELT LIKE we were actually on the Millennium Falcon after the ride I felt really dizzy. At last it was over and thankfully I didn't have to go on it agian!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:34:40 am

Good use of the rhertorical question and parenthesis. This is a good piece of writing Amelia.

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Grace
1/11/2015 01:46:35 am

As I cupped my hands around the object an uneven
surface tickled my hands. I new straight away that it
was not a soft thing, it was hard and squishy.
IT FELT LIKE lots of pebbles stuck together in a
circular shape. Within the object I could feel fluffy felt.
When I opened my eyes, sitting on the table was
a smallish pumpkin made out of shiny, orange rubber beads.
There was a little stump painted in a light brown paint.
A smiley face that was made out of black felt
spread across the pumpkins face. Finally there was a light inside it.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:36:11 am

A lovely opening Grace. You have included a lot of description in your writing.

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casper
1/11/2015 09:28:34 am

Casper was walking with his best friend Lock lambert that lived in the left hand side dome (they were in the same history class together). When they entered the dome Lock saw an ancient artefact on the wall, Lock tried to take it down carefully but it broke anyway. Inside was a book and a necklace. Casper picked up the necklace and it felt like there was something inside it. Casper wanted to smash it but it felt like his father spirit was hidden inside it and he thought it was a clue to help him find his missing father.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:36:54 am

Good work Casper. You have used parenthesis within your writing. I'm also pleased to see you using commas too.

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Alicia
1/11/2015 10:10:10 am

It was just as they had warned us ,I started to become aware of what was going on around m as I opened my eyes .The shakes started to get stronger and more often ,I have been dreading this day for weeks. It felt like the world was tearing apart, I jumped out of my bed and looked out of my window to see a giant tornado whirling towards the house. I dived under my bed and was terrified, all I could do was wait until the storm passed and pray that my family and friends were ok .

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:37:55 am

A lovely effort Alicia. You have used commas to denote clauses within your writing. Try to focus on the inclusion of semi-colons next time.

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thomas
1/11/2015 10:25:02 am

One day me, my family and dog went to the sea side for a look out somewhere instead of been stuck in the grotty hot house. Then my mam and I went rock pooling for crabs, and amongst all of the mucky green rock pools with goodness what inside, I spot something extra odd a smelted type of colourful stone, wich my mam or I didn’t know what it was so I said “can I touch it “ “go on then “ replied mam then I felt it and IT FELT LIKE a crystal thing from many years ago possibly from dinosaur times!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:38:56 am

A good effort Thomas. Could we have added other punctuation within the last sentence?

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Sol
1/11/2015 10:55:56 am

Today the 1st November, my mam and I went to Middlesbrough on the train to go to the cinema to watch Hotel Transylvania 2 and do some Christmas shopping. It felt like a beautiful summers day. There wasn't a cloud in the sky, and the sun shone bright. Instead of people wearing woolie hats and thick coats people were wearing shorts and tshirts. Which was nice to see in November. But as it got later in the day the weather changed. Once we got home and off the train. It was so thick with fog. You could hardly see in front of you.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:40:14 am

I really like this Sol. It has a good introduction. It reminds me of a film or book from a long time ago. What punctuation could we have used when you said 'the weather changed.'?

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Tilly B
2/11/2015 11:03:27 am

It felt like… the worst day of my life. All I heard was my mam shouting “We’re late, we’re late!’’
So I jumped straight my out of bed, unfortunately I tripped on my quilt and hit my head. Ouch!
I walked into the bathroom but my brother was in, I was banging on the door telling him to hurry up! I grabbed my breakfast and looked for the milk, there was none, eventually I found something else to eat. Then I went upstairs to get ready but when I put my top on I couldn’t fasten my button!
Then I brushed my teeth and ran downstairs.
Even more problems, while putting my shoes on my strap snapped.
Eventually I got to school on time and had a great day, but was a start to the day!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:40:53 am

Good work Tilly. I haven't seen many people use the challenge words at the beginning. It helps build the drama I feel.

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Jessica Orrell
2/11/2015 11:19:34 am

The hiccups . The hiccups were really bad. It felt like they were trying to mess with my head right here and now and hurt really badly. So I had to try the apples that Mom got and it kind of worked. It also felt like that I had a headache so I ate the rest of my apple and it sort of helped me . But it's coming back again so whilst my Mom grooms dogs again I had to continue on my computer on the 100 word challenge and my Mathletics and its so much fun when I am with my family.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:41:48 am

Good work Jessica. You have included your challenge words. Try to use a wider range of punctuation within your writing next time.

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deyla
3/11/2015 11:06:07 am



One day I decided to feel different things with my eyes closed. At first I didn’t touch anything but then I felt something peculiar; it was smooth and round… what was it? Then, I had an idea, “Of course the edge of the footstool!”I exclaimed it felt like a smooth rock it was so cold and hard. After about 5 minutes, I started to become bored and so I dashed off hoping to find something more exciting to do like find the other half of my Lego kit that very often went missing but I just ended up watching TV again. Very BORING.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:42:30 am

Good work Deyla. You have used a wide range of punctuation. Try and use a semi-colon within your writing, if possible next time.

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Lucas
3/11/2015 11:19:51 am

When I was on School holidays last week I went to the DLI (Durham Light Infantry) museum with my Grandpa. We had a good look around the museum and saw lots of old fashioned guns, military clothing and vehicles. It felt like I was in the Second World War. There was boxes on a wall that you had to put your hand in to see what was in it, there was a hand, a boot, a rat and a rag with the bubonic plague on it, it was disgusting. I sat in an American jeep, held guns, it was Great!

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:42:57 am

Well done Lucas. You have included parenthesis within your writing. Keep it up!

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Kelsi
3/11/2015 11:34:14 am

Last week on a dark cold and damp morning I woke up yawning and tired but excited because I was going to haggerston castle for the first time ever. I hoped it would be good, when Chloe was dropped off we helped my mam and dad pack the car so we could get there to have a look around the resort park. On our way to our caravan I came across Deyla at Haggerston Castle. When we got into the caravan we looked around and found horse ridding so my mam and dad let Chloe and I go horse riding I went on Nigel and Chloe went on Casper. It felt like a proper holiday.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:43:22 am

Good work Kelsi. You have included your challenge words within your writing,

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Emma
3/11/2015 12:17:12 pm

One morning I woke up being disturbed by a squeaking sound coming from down stairs? I felt like I had woke up on the wrong side of the bed, literately, because I had rolled to the side with the wall, and hit my head off it. It hurt😪. Then I fell out the other side. I was miserable. Then I heard my dog Sammy rummaging through his basket for his toy. He wouldn't stop squeaking his toy Monkey. Monkey was the one waking us up, so I took it off him, then he barked at me, because that was the toy he was looking for. Silly doggy.

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Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:43:48 am

I like the use of short sentences within your writing Emma. Well done!

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HARRY
11/11/2015 10:14:54 am

One baking hot day, I was at the beach in Barcelona.I had caught the taxi down to the seafront; and the first thing I saw was beautiful white sand and glistening turquoise ocean.When I arrived,I could feel the soft breeze cascading across my hair.The first thing I did was stroll down the board walk and ordered some food.I enjoyed it.After that, we hired a sunbed for my mam, while me and my dad ventured into the sea.It felt like I was stepping into a warm bath. When we came out, I dried off and went to get a drink and ice lolly. THE END.

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michael
14/11/2015 05:18:42 am

One freezing cold day, in the plain English weather I had caught a limo traveling to hays travel so I gave them £30 to get to the travel agents since it was a limo. I travelled for 15 minutes and came to a stop, it was the travel agents. I ran inside and booked myself a holiday for 4 weeks in Greece. It was in 1 weeks time so he got another limo home and started packing.

Then the moment came when it was time to go on holiday; he collected all of his belongings and set off to Newcastle airport in his Ferrari what had squirrel and giraffe pictures on it.Hours later when he already arrived at the airport he arrived in Greece and he felt the cool breeze cascading across my long pointy nose. It felt like a softer English summer breeze.

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Ethan W
23/11/2015 09:30:13 am

Today I felt like I wanted some ice-cream but the last time I ate ice-cream, my dogs took it straight from my hand, I was chasing them all around my house.It was Dylan that had hold of it, then part of it fell on the floor I slipped and nearly broke my neck.
Later that day I decided to go buy some ice-cream but yet again, my puppy stole it this time honestly I'm glad I wasn't raised by wolves. Some times they are useless. So I really didn't like my dogs after today I really hate him in fact


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