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 For this week's challenge, there are no words, only a picture. You have 100 words to write the most creative piece you have to this date. As we have been focusing on a wider range of punctuation - it would be useful if you could include this within your writing.
Enjoy your weekend!
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Liam M
16/10/2015 10:47:44 am
In America I saw an old black car at a view point that looked over the streets of California. Inside the car there were four teddy bears. I jumped in the front seat moving one bear to the back and started the engine and drove off. We drove down the country roads where there were motor bikes racing down the road at high speeds, we had to swerve from side to side to dodge them but the four bears fell out and rolled down the hillside getting stuck on the famous Hollywood sign. I could hear them shouting “HELP!” but there was nothing I could do. The hill was too dangerous to climb down.
Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:46:50 am
I like this story Liam. It makes me wonder what could happen next, therefore wanting me to read on more.
Lucy.B
17/10/2015 05:14:39 am
There was once a girl called Millie, and she had some magic stuffed bears-that came to life, of course, what's magic without things that come to life! Every Sunday, she would take them on an amazing, fun, fantastic and...excellent adventure. Last week it was to the beach, but this week it is to the hillside. Food, check. Bags, check. But most importantly stuffed bears!check. All set and ready to go. 20 dreadful minutes of singing to Mama Mia over and over again we were there. (I wasn't looking forward to the journey back!)
Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:47:37 am
I love how you draw the reader in by actively having a conversation with them at the beginning Lucy. You have used parenthesis within your writing.
Michael
17/10/2015 10:45:30 am
Hello, my name is Shantan Blanton and I am extremely rich. Our family has a 30 story company tower which is a smart house, or should I say a smart tower. Scrap that, I am 32 years old and am a billionaire who has a 4 story smart mansion. I have at least 10 super duper cars including a Lamborghini aventador, Lamborghini Gallardo, Lamborghini veneno and Shelby cobra. There was a really lovely car with great history but I have no time to go and get and pay the money so I decided I would miss out my work of running the BLANTON tower but it can run itself with Ronald Davison the co leader of the tower. So the next morning I went to get the car but the person who was selling it already sold it he was just waiting for the trailer to arrive but suddenly I gave the man more money then he wanted so he had to sell it to me and I went back in my new car because I walked all the way. It was so shiny and I got a bunch of teddies with it so they live in the back of the car.
Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:48:57 am
This seems to be a little over the 100 words Michael. You really do love Lamborghinis! Try to use a wider range of punctuation next time.
Connor
18/10/2015 03:50:50 am
The car Teddy cool and his friends were cruising in is a 1956 Ford Victoria. In the summer sun with the roof down the sun glistened on the bonnet of the car while parked up at the beech. The owner of the car was sun bathing and Teddy cool and his friends were having a good time chilling out In the car. Everybody who walked past the car stopped and looked , one person stopped and asked if the car was for sale.The owner was not there one of his friends suggested he cud of went to get sum fish and chips.
Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:50:15 am
Well done Connor. I like this story. You could have started off including commas to develop your writing.
Lucas
18/10/2015 04:53:17 am
We went for a day out to the seaside, we were looking forward to fish and chips and ice-cream. It was a sunny day so off we went and as we pulled into the car park we saw this lovely old car, I turned round to dad and said “ I think that car has been took over by a group of teddy bears”. We all laughed and took a photo of it in the car park. Everybody stood round wondering what was going on, then the driver returned and said “we’ve been on a teddy bears picnic to the seaside”.
Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:51:05 am
An interesting story Lucas. I'm sure I would have laughed too! Well done for including speech and commas.
Daniel
18/10/2015 05:28:35 am
One early morning some teddies where on their way to the best looking teddy contest. When they got there they were a bit intimidated by their opponents. They even saw teddies doing the hacker constantly. Then they started practising their theme in the show. Then their main competition stepped up to perform they could hear the fans cheering as loud as possible. Then soon it was their turn to go and perform. The teddies sang their favourite song by Katie Perry. Soon the song was over and they were scared. Then they announced the winner and it was the teddies.
Mr Turner
5/11/2015 09:51:31 am
Good work Daniel. Try to use a wider range of punctuation within your writing.
Amelia
18/10/2015 05:42:41 am
One Sunny day, a little girl named Amelia went to the shops with her mum and she decided to take one of her dolls with her Amelia Jane and a few teddies.But when they had finished shopping they noticed that the car was gone !!! "Oh No"said Amelia, "My car,it's gone"said her mum.
deyla
18/10/2015 06:23:29 am
“how long until we get there?”grumbled the tiny teddy bear who at that moment in time was rather bored. “it’ll take longer if you talk more’‘replied brownie, who was patiently driving the posh car. The teddies were going to see the sunderland illuminations as a matter of a fact they lived there!Brownie,Tiny,Slick and cookie had gone on holiday to west Auckland, where the very first world cup took place. Eventually,they reached sunderland they would have been able to go to see the lighting earlier if cookie hadn’t been so slow getting out the car!
kate
18/10/2015 06:26:39 am
The time had come. It was the biggest competition of the year. The competition was when you had a team and one member of the team had to go in the stocks. Then the rest of the team would throw as many tomatoes at him or her as they can in ninety seconds. The record was one hundred and one tomatoes. The prize was: a classic convertible with four large teddy bears inside. The competition winners this year were called: “Team in it to win it.” They successfully won with one hundred and eleven tomatoes thrown excellently at the person!
This is the pitcher , what i took when i was shopping at ASDA with my mam. What could of bin happening?
Grace
18/10/2015 10:21:42 am
when I look at this photo I see a sea
Emma
18/10/2015 11:16:44 am
The day, the four bears, Daddy, Mammy, Milly and Harry where going for a family picnic, on the hills, in their shiny black car. The car had a classic open roof, because it was a pretty hot day. They traveled miles until they met their friends who had a caravan and they sat down onto the over grown hills and opened the weaved basket. Inside was a pack of eight cheese sandwiches, ten donuts, twenty strawberries, five oranges, and they munched away happily. After they had finished eating they went for a long stroll around the grassy green hill together.
thomas
19/10/2015 11:42:52 am
Well all I see, is two big fat fluffy bears hanging out the window with snazzy shades on in a black car. It looks like they have been abandoned in an empty car park amongst the deserted mountains. Since when have silly teddy bears had a driving licence? Have the teddies been evil enough to steel an innocent man’s car? Bears have now been crowned with the thieves of the month award! The bears have now gone back home to celebrate their whopping victory of the thieves of the month award. The bears are over the moon with their achievement.
Tilly R
20/10/2015 08:50:07 am
Today I went to the big beach with all my family. When I was there we came across a car full of teddies. I was very exited. My mam said "don't touch. There not yours." We carried on the hike to the beach. My legs were getting tired, my knees were aching so badly my dad had to carry me. We finally arrived at the big beach and I could sit down and relax my legs. The waves where high so we tuck our shoes and socks off and rolled our leggings up and we jumped over them. I tripped over and I got wet. After we went to a old ice-cream stand we grabbed a ice-cream from there.
Sol
20/10/2015 12:01:14 pm
One day, four bears went on a road trip. The driver was taking to the
Tilly B
20/10/2015 12:08:21 pm
Tonight’s top breaking story is coming live from Bishop Auckland. Witnesses have been called police regarding teddy bears being spotted in a dark black convertible car, down Newgate Street. Here with the latest is our reporter Tilly B. ‘’Police have assured the locals that these bears will not hurt the public, and now it’s back to you in the studio.’’
jessica orrell
20/10/2015 12:18:43 pm
One sunny day a family off three bears wanted to have some time off. They wanted to go to the beach by car but daddy bear could not drive as he had stumped his toe and had a bandage on his foot. So they had to ask their friend, Mr Fox. What did the fox say.......? He said yes. He has a big American sports car, that has no roof, and four white tyres and he said that he would be delighted to take the bear family to the beach. So off they all went in search of ice creams and sunshine in Mr Fox's big thunder cloud car.
Alicia
21/10/2015 11:26:30 am
One beautiful summers day I decided to get my beloved classic convertible out of the garage and take it for a lovely ride out with the family. My car is my most favourite possession. After I took off the cover and gave it one last polish, off I set with my wife and children. The roof was down and the warm sun was scorching on our heads and the wind was blowing through our fur. How much fun we were having, everyone was looking as we went speeding past . We parked up in a car park so we could go to the ice cream parlour. Everyone was stopping and staring, some people were even taking photographs. I can't think for one reason why, haven't people seen a car like mine before?!?
Ethan Stokes
22/10/2015 11:31:15 am
The heat was unbelievably hot; as the bears sat in the old little blue Lamborghini adventador with their shades half hanging of their faces. A disgruntled man grinned and then took another sip off his fizzy drink while talking to the rest of his friends. The heat was climbing; it was now hot enough to cook an egg on the front of the car bonnet, as a few more cars drove into the car park the ground was starting to crack. The American diner was just starting to open (the car park was starting to overflow) lots of very hungry people were walking into the diner!
Scarlet
4/11/2015 12:14:41 am
Hello, my name is Eliza teddy, I was created by a scientist and he made me extremely rich. I bought this beautiful classic car for £1000. I was very lonely on my extended road trip exploring the world and its artificats. I flew by plane to California and my car was transported there by boat. In California I begged the 84 year old scientist who had created me to make three friends for me. He agreed as his last work and he went to his lab and it was two days before I saw him again. Here I am in this picture with my new friends ready to set off once again. First stop the beach !
Scarlet
9/11/2015 11:27:12 am
I like everybody's storys
harry
11/11/2015 09:33:53 am
Hello there, I'm a really rich teddy bear.I think of myself as being all tough and hard;but really I am a soft animal for children. This is my story of how I became rich...
Ethan W
23/11/2015 08:52:33 am
One misty morning in the year 1967 a young boy called Bob was driving throug the country side but his dad was running out of fuel so he had to stop but a minute later it broke down then there was some teddy bears walking down but a taxi had dropped them off at a wrong stop so then my dad said if you help us I will give you a ride to your destination but they helped as much as they could until one of them found a car and jumped in and Nicked it Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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