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The prompt this week is 5 words. They must all be used in your writing but do not need to be in this order. Try to write them the words in bold so that they can be easily seen.
Broken Green Swimming Cat Lifted Good luck and enjoy your weekend.
44 Comments
Kayleigh.
7/11/2014 12:52:16 am
I saw a GREEN CAT SWIMMING in the big lake nearby our house, it looked like a statue! I LIFTED it, but I dropped it on the floor. It was now BROKEN! This is my 100 word challenge I hope you enjoyed it!
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:18:53 am
Well done Kayleigh! I like how you have included a clause in your writing!
Jessica
7/11/2014 04:19:23 am
Once there was an alien that looked like a CAT. The alien was called Dave. Dave had a blue, wooly hat. He liked to eat BROKEN, GREEN tree branches as a snack during the day. He didn't like to eat it at night because he had nightmares! Dave had a slime (a pet ) called Swimmer. Swimmer was called swimmer because Swimmer liked swimming in slime. Swimmer was so light that he could get held up by a feather! Dave lifted slime because he was so light and he needed a bath.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:20:23 am
Well done Jessica! You have included parenthesis and punctuation for effect in your writing. Could we add a clause next time?
Sadie
7/11/2014 06:49:11 pm
My family and I were enjoying a delightful Sunday lunch, suddenly I heard a loud smash, I rushed to see what was the matter. The glass on my fish tank was shattered and BROKEN! Blitz the CAT was looking intently and licking his lips. Mam shrieked "oh no that GREEN stinky water is ruining my new floor!" Dad ran like a bat out of hell to get a vase, as I LIFTED up my pet fish from the floor. Nemo was flapping frantically and slipping out of my hands, I dropped him into the water, Nemo was SWIMMING again, everyone was overjoyed except for Blitz...
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:20:58 am
Well done Sadie. This is a good, all round effort.
Josh!
7/11/2014 08:05:00 pm
It was a super windy day here at Bishop Auckland,GREEN trees were scattererd and some were layed BROKEN on the by-pass.Leafs were LIFTED into the bitterly cold air and a ginger CAT was running along the by-pass trying to escape from the herendous weather,it was so scared it began SWIMMING in the lake that lead to Newcastle where there was some good looking weather.Eventually the bad weather worn off when I looked at the debri mall there wreckage could be fixed and it did.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:21:33 am
Good work Josh. I like how you have used a range of openers.
Guy
7/11/2014 09:40:14 pm
This is my story about why the pet CAT does not like SWIMMING and never will. Now I will tell the story , 1000 years ago when the hills looked different and all the ice was BROKEN as far as the eye could see a green prehistoric cat saw a volcano that had LIFTED its lid and lava was exploding out the top . The cat hid in the green long bright wet grass the lava got closer and closer and closer until the cat moved in to the sand it got closer so the cat jumped in to the water and drowned. The end.
Guy
9/11/2014 11:09:45 pm
It was good
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:22:31 am
A good effort Guy. I like the idea of the story. Could we add an ellipsis to build the tension?
kody
8/11/2014 03:27:44 am
Oh no that CAT again! Dad was very angry because the cat had been in our garden making a big mess. He ran outside to scare it away and fell into the GREEN paddling pool which had just been filled for the children to go SWIMMING in. When Dad LIFTED his head, the cat was still there. He got up and started chasing it round the garden. Then the cat leapt into the air with its claws out and landed in the paddling pool. There was a loud hiss and all the air came out and the water drained out washing the cat away. Now Dad was soaking and the paddling pool was BROKEN.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:23:08 am
Good work Kody. I like how you have included a clause within your writing.
Luke p
8/11/2014 10:01:19 pm
On Sunday morning my family and I went swimming when we arived the locker that we tried to use was BROKEN. We had to wear a light GREEN band to get into the pool when I first got in the water was freezing but I soon got use to it. I LIFTED the safety line up so I could get under to lead myself into the deep end where the wave machine was and when it comes on you choke on the water when a wave goes down your throat. Then on the way back home a CAT sprinted really fast across the road when my dad was driving then we eventually made it home in one piece. We had a lovely Sunday dinner and watched the football.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:24:04 am
Well done Luke. This is a really good effort.
bethany
8/11/2014 10:33:27 pm
on a warm summer day a CAT decided he was going SWIMMING!
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:24:56 am
Good work Bethany! I like how you have included brackets within your writing.
Katie
8/11/2014 10:38:53 pm
The bird of prey hovered cautiously above its target below. It swooped and suddenly LIFTED the little cute tabby CAT into the shining, sunny sky. The evil disgusting hawk stupidly dropped the kitten into the diserted river. A man wearing a GREEN fluorescent jacket saw this and without thinking jumped into the freezing, cold water and started SWIMMING towards the drowning cat.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:25:44 am
Well done Katie. I like the wide range of vocabulary used and the fact you have included a clause.
Katie
8/11/2014 10:44:05 pm
I accidentally pressed submit before I'd finished.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:26:12 am
Haha! No worries.
Jamie-lee
8/11/2014 11:03:28 pm
Long ago there was an unusual world. This strange world was called BROKEN LIFTED land in that land there lived a GREEN CAT. All of the other strange coloured creatures called him Wiscky. Wisckys best friend was a orange coloured elephant called Stamppy, they loved spending time together. One day on January the 4th 1:26 pm something very special happened. Wiscky and Stamppy were having a sleepover suddenly they heard a loud knock on the door. Stamppy answered it, at the door was a small blue mouse. At first Stamppy did'nt see the mouse at first because the mouse was so small...
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:27:07 am
I like how you have ended with an ellipsis at the end, Jamie-lee as if it was a snapshot of the story.
Matthew
8/11/2014 11:11:41 pm
When school was finished I went home to get my swimming kit and my cat so he wasn't lonely. When I was ready my mam drove me there. When we got there I put my swimming kit on and jumped into the pool and played with a ball while my mam was holding my cat. She was stroking it to keep it calm, then I went under water with my green goggles on, when my cat saw them he jumped out of my mams arms and launched himself into the pool and sank to the bottom. I took a deep breath and swam to the bottom and lifted my cat all the way to the top and put him on the side then I went to jump out but slipped back in and whacked my arm on the side. At the hospital the x-ray showed it was broken.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:27:53 am
Well done Matthew. You have included all of the challenge words within your writing.
Lucy
9/11/2014 02:06:12 am
One day I went swimming. I looked out side to see a beautiful green Palm tree. I wanted to get my purse, it wasn't there! Instead it was on the floor and my bag was broken. I went into the changing rooms and noticed a cat in my bag, I left her in for the whole time I was swimming. Suddenly I felt a lift in the pool I shouted to the life guard, 'the pool the pool is lifting!'There was an alarm everybody got out of the pool except me! I quickly escaped from the pool and survived the rest of the day in the sun.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:28:58 am
A really interesting story Lucy. I like how yow you have tried to build tension within your writing.
Caitlin
9/11/2014 02:29:56 am
One day a CAT was looking at his kitchen when he started cleaning the cupboads. CAT found a green jar and cleaned it and the CAT dropped it and it was BROKEN. So the CAT went to get some glue, CAT tried to stick the jar altogether again but it didn't work it all fell apart. So CAT went to the shop to by a new GREEN jar the shop had ran out so CAT went to every shop he new they all had ran out to. So CAT went SWIMMING to take his mind off it for a bit and guess what was in the changing rooms was a GREEN jar it was a shiny one too. CAT went home and put it in the cupboard and went to bed
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:29:25 am
I like how you have used the challenge words more than once Caitlin.
Daniel
9/11/2014 03:14:27 am
One day I was playing with my friend Blaine, Blaine and I were playing with stones. Then Blaine threw a stone at a window and it was BROKEN so it hit some body,then we found a GREEN CAT SWIMMING in a muddy lake so we LIFTED the cat up and took it in side blaines house.Then it jumped in blaines face and when it did that it scrached him, Blaine was injured and had to go to hospital for treatment , he had to have a tetnus injection in case the cat had any diseases.But he was fine, phew.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:30:14 am
Well done Daniel. I like how you have included a clause within your writing. What punctuation could you have ended with at the end?
Cobi
9/11/2014 04:15:47 am
I have a very strange uncle who whenever he walks his CAT the will only wear his GREEn coat, the coat is very special because it has two BROKEN buttons and a zig-zag zip . His cat is black and is called Poppet it is a nice cat even though it's eyes are red . Everyday he takes his cat to the park,Poppet loves to play on the swings , my uncle has to lift him onto the swings "purr" said Poppet, he also likes the slide but his purrfured thing is the round about.Every Monday after going to the park my uncle takes Poppet SWIMMING, he loves him.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:30:57 am
Good work Cobi. I like how you have included clauses within your writing.
Caitlin
9/11/2014 11:16:07 pm
Well done
beau
10/11/2014 03:08:36 am
one day I walked past my mums GREEN vase and my CAT tripped me up and the vase was suddenly BROKEN I LIFTED him up and claimed to my mum it was him. Then later that day we went SWIMMING and I was jumping in the big pool confidently. After that I went for a rest and fell asleep.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:31:29 am
Well done Beau. You have included all 5 challenge words in your writing.
Luke.D
10/11/2014 03:49:41 am
I was on my way to my friend Jay's 10th birthday party at Bishop Auckland SWIMMING pool. On the way there I saw a ginger CAT with massive bright GREEN eyes, it looked at me very strangely as if it was going to attack me, so I ran past it very quickly before it could hurt me. As I was running I tripped on one of my shoe laces and fell to the floor with a great big band! I slid across the hard concrete path and landed into some BROKEN glass. Ouch!! My legs were cut to bits, so my dad LIFTED me up off the floor and took me to hospital, I missed my friends party, all because of that strange cat.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:32:20 am
This is a good effort Luke. I like that you have used a range of openers and a clause.
Henry
11/11/2014 12:46:55 am
Last week my next door neighbour's CAT was walking along our BROKEN fence when it fell into a large water butt of slimy GREEN water and it was swimming for its life. I saw it from my bedroom window so I ran down the garden path and I LIFTED the CAT out of the water butt. The CAT was scared and soaking wet and I got pretty wet too. I dried the CAT with an old towel an then I dried myself. By this time the CAT had run away. When my neighbour found out that I had saved her CAT she gave me a bag of sweets.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:32:41 am
Well done Henry. You have included all of the challenge words within your writing.
Ethan
11/11/2014 02:25:44 am
The broken old swimming pool was knocked down about a year ago. They knocked it down with a crane, a ball on the hook and then lifted the ball in the air,then smashed the broken old swimming pool into little pieces.A g cat was watching near bye on a small hill next to a tree in the shade because the sun was out in the sky.
Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:33:50 am
Well done Ethan. You have included all of the challenge words within your writing.
joe
12/11/2014 03:28:34 pm
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Mr Turner
16/11/2014 02:33:32 am
I like it Joe! You have used the 5 challenge words and included them into one of your hobbies. Brilliant! Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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