… but it is yellow…
You have another 100 words to add to these 4 making 104. Think carefully about what you write and do make sure you use them all! Good Luck!
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… but it is yellow… You have another 100 words to add to these 4 making 104. Think carefully about what you write and do make sure you use them all! Good Luck!
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Kayleigh
12/9/2014 02:23:49 am
"But it is yellow!" I cried when I saw my little yellow and white lego house. It had windows and a white door, but from a point, it looked somewhat yellow. So I put in a minifigure with a dark red dress. It looked the same! I thought and thought until I amounted "I will put yellow bricks in place of the white ones!" So I did. Perfect! It was now all-yellow! Based on a true lego model - by me of course! But the part about the minifig it would be true if I had it at the time! Anyway, this is my 104 word challenge #2 I hoped you enjoyed it
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:42:55 am
Well done Kayleigh, this is a lovely piece of writing. I like how you have included short sentences for effect.
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lucy
12/9/2014 02:54:10 am
once there was a alien space ship slowly hovring down to earth. The aliens hit earth like abuzy bee pollenating the flowers. As these unusual rainbow looking creatures stomping down on to the soft dewey grass.The aliens seemed very friendly and invited us into the space ship i slowly replied "wow this is a cool green space ship" and my frind said "no but it is yellow"" i am just joking" i replied.they offered us afternoon tea "i was a little unsure" as there was purple cake and yellow sandwichs so i said fastly "yes" and ran to the space ship.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:44:35 am
Super effort Lucy. I like the idea of this piece of writing, based on the extra-terrestrial. Don't forget to use a capital letter for 'I'. E.g. ...I replied.
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lucy
20/9/2014 03:28:23 am
I was going to do all the captial letters but I forgot to I will rember next time and I saw you today
Guy
12/9/2014 03:18:45 am
All this year I have been saving my tiny amount of pocket money for a black and white bmx that I saw last summer I set my heart on it. I knew it would take a long time but I didn't care because it would be worth it. On Christmas Day there was a huge present in the front room that was shaped like a bike, my mam and dad said last night they had gone to halfords and bought me the bmx. I ripped open the present and all I thought to myself was but it is yellow but I didn't want to tell my mam and dad or they would be heart broken.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:47:23 am
Well done Guy. I like the inclusion of the character's thoughts and feelings about it and how they showed compassion to their mam and dad. Could we have added any punctuation in there to develop the drama!
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Jessica
12/9/2014 03:48:46 am
Lucy asked Kate for a pen at school 'Can I have a pen please Kate?''' asked Lucy quietly. ''Yes you can,' replied Kate. Kate gave Lucy a yellow pen . 'BUT ITS YELLOW-I DONT LIKE YELLOW!' Kate shouted loudly. Mr turner turned around swiftly and said calmly 'what are you shouting at?' Kate sobbed 'Lucy gave me a yellow pen-I don't like yellow, ' 'Here use my pen,' Mr turners pen was a dark blue one with light blue stripes.' Thank you Mr Turner,'
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:49:44 am
Good work Jessica. I like the emphasis on the capital letters for our challenge words. Could we have described the character's interactions. E.g. ...as he kindly handed her the pen.
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Katie
12/9/2014 04:30:59 am
We decided to buy a new car as ours was getting too old.So we drove to the garage to investigate which car we would like. As we strolled around a man who worked there asked "Do you need any help?. Mam replied "yes please , we are looking for a white shiny ford kuga .Do you have one ?". "No ,I'm sorry we don't , although I'll show you something similar". He took us over to a row of cars and I saw this sparkling clean car with silver alloys and tinted black windows . Mum loved this car but I shouted loudly "but it is yellow ! " .
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:52:48 am
Good work Katie. I like how you added the challenge words in at the end. I also like the inclusion of speech within your work and the range of punctuation used.
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Caitlin
12/9/2014 07:35:21 pm
I had a dream. I was walking through the jungle surrounded by lots of GREEN trees. The GOLD moon shone above. We found a tall tree with big bunches of GREEN bananas. We put the SILVER ladder against the BROWN trunk of the tree and wearing ORANGE trainers we climbed up. With PINK gloves on we pulled the bunch of bananas from the tree and put them in the BLUE box to keep them safe. We took the bananas back to the GREY shed until morning. The next day I woke up to check in my shed for the bunch but it is YELLOW...
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:55:09 am
Interesting work Caitlin. I like the emphasis of the colours as if it was to make a statement. I'm delighted that you have used an ellipsis. Could we use a wider range of openers?
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Josh
12/9/2014 08:16:18 pm
One day I was out for a walk with my dog Tia and come across a most wonderful creature . It had bluey green eyes , a red pointy beak and the longest legs you've ever seen . It also had the most delicate yellow feathers ever . It was the most beautiful bird in the world . When I arrived home I rang Grandad . When he answered I said "I've just seen the most loveliest bird . It had very delicate yellow feathers". Granda replied "I bet they were orange". "But they were yellow" I said . Of course Granda never beloved me . I knew they really were yellow.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:56:26 am
Well done Josh. I like that you have included speech within your writing. Could you think of any other verbs for said?
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Danny
12/9/2014 10:51:23 pm
Reporting Reporting our teacher, Mr Turner, told me to draw a full page of red but it was yellow so i told him and i got told off. We went on minecraft to make our imagination so i built a fishing hut it was playtime, when i was coming out of class i tripped over and broke my arm i hurt it so badly that mr turner had to come and see it. I went to the hospital and i got a pot on then a month after i got it took of. so thats my story bye bye bye bye
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 04:58:34 am
Well done Danny. It seems you have included a lot of action in your writing. Don't forget your capital letters.
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Sadie
13/9/2014 03:58:49 am
The beaming sun shone through my window as I slowly opened my eyes, before getting out of my comfy bed I played on my Ipad for a while then I brushed my teeth until they were sparkling, after that I ate my breakfast, which was yummy. My Grandad came to visit and he took our dog, Millie, out for a long walk. After Teeside Park we decided to go to Yarm, on the way we went in the Range Rover garage to look at some Range Rover Evoque's "why don't we get that one" questioned Dad "but it is yellow, so no!" Mam exclaimed.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:16:20 am
Well done Sadie, you have engaged the reader and added lovely adjectives.
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Evie-mae
13/9/2014 05:59:57 pm
Hello i'm evie-mae and i love the colour orange and hate the horrible colour yellow.My walls were green but i wanted them orange so i send my dad immediately to the paint shop so he could get me some orange paint. He couldn't find orange paint so he bought yellow.The next day i was waiting for my bedroom to be transformed into a lovely orange room with blue and white butterfly's flying beautifully but suddenly i walked excitingly in the dull room with sloppy yellow paint and i said ''but it is yellow paint'' ''but i took ages with this''my dad said hopefully
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:15:36 am
Good work Evie-mae. I like that you have included speech within your writing. Please check capital letters.
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kate
13/9/2014 08:52:35 pm
I was on an adventure, on a plane to Disney world. I couldn’t wait any longer, I was so excited! When we got off the plane I was going to buy something in English money but the shops all had American Dollars. My mum wouldn’t let me I was a little confused. We weren’t on our way to the apartment yet there was another aeroplane to go. When we were at the apartment we went to sleep straight away. The next day on the way to magic kingdom we saw a bus but it wasn’t red, but it is yellow! How unusual.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:14:38 am
Well done Kate, you have engaged the reader!
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matthew
13/9/2014 09:34:28 pm
... but it is yellow...
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:14:12 am
Great work Matthew. You have attempted to use ellipsis in your work. Could we use a wider range of openers next time?
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LUKE P
13/9/2014 11:49:07 pm
One early morning my brother and I were going conkering so we went to Witton Castle where we knew has loads of conker trees. My dad took a massive stick to help knock them down from the big trees which looked like skyscrapers completely picked with spikey conkers. The leaves have to beenBrown/yellow when they are ready but they were yellow but we knew they were ready as there was loads on the floor. My brother Jake and I put them in vinegar to harden them and the next day we put them on rope and had a conker fight
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:12:51 am
Well done Luke. An interesting piece of writing that kept me engaged. It made me want to know who won the fight. What other adjectives could we have used to describe the stick?
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Daniel
14/9/2014 04:14:19 am
I was going to have a little walk down the road but there was an alien invasion. My friend said "but it is yellow so it must not be an alien invasion after all " but they came out with skark guns aka mega sharks well thats what we call them. Most of us want selfies with them, the rest of us want them gone so mainly we have a war and thats what we did. Sharks and bullets flying through the air until we defeated the aliens and peace and harmony was brought to earth.Humans were safe for now for how long? No one knows
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:11:35 am
Good work Daniel. I like how you have included speech within your writing. Could we have added punctuation at the end, such as an ellipsis in order to keep the reader keen to read more.
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Robbie
14/9/2014 04:42:48 am
One day I decided to write a list of all the things I might like for my birthday. It was a long list and included cool things like a new play station 4, fifa 15, scooter, a new bed, football,and lots of other things. The thing I wanted most was the Liverpool away strip which I thought was black but it is yellow. I finished my list and gave it to my dad . On my birthday I was so excited to open my presents, I got some fab things. I was so happy when I opened my last gift it was the yellow away strip for Liverpool and I loved it .
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:08:08 am
Good effort Robbie. I like how you have added thoughts and feelings into your work. Could we have added punctuation within your work? Tell me, you loved it!
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Robbie
4/10/2014 10:57:22 pm
I loved it !
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Neve
14/9/2014 04:43:46 am
My best friend invited me to her birthday party, the theme was purple.I was so excited for the party the next day my mum and I started to scan through my dresses , my mum suggested lots but I didn't want to wear any of them she then found my new dress for when I go on holiday it's my favourite dress. But it is yellow and the theme is purple. I eventually found a purple dress so I was all set for the party.On the day everyone looked fantastic in their funky purple outfits. We had a really fun time.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:09:22 am
Well done Neve. I like that you have added a short sentence to dramatise the character's opinion. Could we have added any punctuation?
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Robbie
14/9/2014 04:47:03 am
One day I disided to write a list of all the things I might like for my birthday. It was a long list and included cool things like a new play station 4, fifa 15, scooter, a new bed, football,and lots of other things. The thing I wanted most was the Liverpool away strip which I thought was black but it is yellow. I finished my list and gave it to my dad . On my birthday I was so excited to open my presents, I got some fab things. I was so happy when I opened my last gift it was the yellow away strip for Liverpool and I loved it .
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madelene
15/9/2014 04:05:49 am
“Come on lets go to the beach “dad said shoving us in the shiny car.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:03:23 am
A good effort Madelene. I do like that you have included speech within your writing and the use of punctuation.
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Ethan
15/9/2014 04:16:18 am
.But it is yellow shouted the fans, why is he being sent off. The referee had made a mistake, Joe Hart was sent off. Ronaldo slid in and Joe Hart came out but missed the ball and got Ronaldo's leg. England had no substitutes so they put Daniel Sturrige in goal. Amazingly he saved a fantastic strike by diving in the left top corner. The crowed for England roared and the fans for Portagl booed, England won the games successfully one nill. England had a party to celebrate their victory, it was on for hours and hours. Next game will be exciting. Don’t miss it....
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:04:34 am
I like the inclusion of the ellipsis at the end Ethan. Keep it up.
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Bethany
15/9/2014 04:18:24 am
On the night of Halloween a strange thing passed over and crashed into my back garden my parents were asleep so i tiptoed down the stares silently opened the door and a bright light shone and something scurried across my feet and i looked down and it was a mouse but it was yellow.After all it is halloween.i followed the mouse into the weird crashed ship and he gave me some pink cheese i ate some and i turned blue the mouse laughed and cried
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:01:06 am
Well done Bethany, you have engaged the reader. Don't forget that 'I' must be a capital letter.
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Cobi
15/9/2014 06:31:47 am
One family shopping day out at the top of the list was some new football boots.But these werent any boots these were special football boots (goal scoring boots ). I had designed my boots style,colour and size. My boots have to be firm ground studs, black laces, size 3 yellow and black in colour, I new what I wanted. Off to the sports shop we went. Dad picked loads that he liked purple,pink,orange and green ones he then showed me a pair of blue boots, sorry dad but it is yellow I want .
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:00:19 am
Well done Cobi. I am pleased to see you have included parenthesis within your writing. We could have added a semi-colon in at the end instead of a comma but good to see you adding commas.
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kody
16/9/2014 01:13:30 am
"But it is yellow," I cried singing my favourite song in my head. Mam shouted, "LUNCH!".
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:06:48 am
Good work Kody. I like the emphasis of the word lunch and that you have added punctuation for effect.
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Joe part 2
16/9/2014 04:26:23 am
The super bandit was looking for the stolen loot. Instead he found a red portal it had many little white tornadoes in it. He went in. Then there was a world full of different toys gogos to small plastic soldiers. But they were all running like mad and everything was on fire and then he saw the sheriff with a flame thrower and to make matters worse there were 8 spaceships. The super bandit asked a gogo "whats going on?" the gogo replied "the sheriff is taking over quick we must save ourselves, back through the portal!!" The super bandit said "but its yellow" But the gogo didn't care and pushed him in.
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:06:02 am
Well done Joe. A very imaginative story. You kept the reader interested.
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Henry
16/9/2014 04:33:38 am
It was my favourite lesson of the week: chemistry and I was about to create some potions. I was sitting in class, half-listening to the teacher's instructions. I was sure Mr Turner said something about not making the potion go yellow because it will cause an explosion. Carefully I began pouring two liquids into my test tube. Suddenly it made a loud pop and started to fizz. Then it turned from purple to yellow. "Mr Turner," I shouted "my potion has gone wrong." "It will be fine," he replied. "But it is yellow," I said anxiously.
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beau
16/9/2014 04:35:46 am
"I want a new dress for my birthday and I want to choose it too!" Lily said to her mother "ok we can go tomorrow". The next day arrived quickly and school dragged like it had been a whole year it finally came though time to go to the shops to get my dress thought Lily to herself. they walked into Primark first "hate it " Lily said disgusted in what she had seen. She saw one in Next and decided to try it on it was red and was flowery it wasn't her size so she ordered her mum to get a smaller size she came back and Lily's exact words were '' but it is yellow I want red!''
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Mr Turner
18/9/2014 05:05:19 am
Well done Beau. You have interested the reader.
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Luke.d
16/9/2014 05:33:26 am
My mam was giving my dad and me a quiz on football strips, "but it is yellow" I shouted at my dad as we argued about the colour of the Norwich strip, he was determined it was orange. "Why do you think they are called the canarys" I said. My mam said "I'll have a look on Google and whoever is right I'll give them a pound". So I sat ther with my fingers crossed "please be yellow please be yellow" I was saying to myself. My mam said "the answer is" with a big drum roll "yellow". Brilliant I was right dad was wrong.
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