100 word challenge #12

28/11/2014

Here in the UK we definitely have a late autumn with golden coloured leaves finally falling from the trees. They are making wonderful carpets for us to walk on or ‘scuff’ along in! I am using this for your writing this week. Please make sure you use the prompt as it is written. The prompt this week is:

…but as the leaves rustled…

48 Comments

bethany

28/11/2014 12:57:45 am

It was a late Sunday morning in Autumn when millions of children sprang out of the doors to reach their den made from leaves when they arrived only to to find that the wind had knocked it down so they re-built it.BUT AT THE LEAVES RUSTLED.The wind decided to pay another visit and guess what yes it was knocked down again the leaves spread every where but one special leaf was still standing a golden leaf.Then meany years later the leaf was discovered by a young boy named Ross (now he is magic)i hope i will find it!!!!

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:34:44 pm

Good work Bethany! You have included brackets within your writing. Try to include the challenge words within a sentence and not on their own.

Lucy

28/11/2014 01:45:13 am

I knew it was autumn. As I step out of the house, I could see my breathe like a chimney flowing away up into the sky. I was walking to town I thought I would take a shortcut through the woods in the murky fog, but as the leaves rustled I turned my head, there was no body to be seen. I carried on walking but I caught a shrew scrambling through the rustling leaves; I don't know who was more frightened, me or the shrew, I found some raisins in my pocket I threw it down to the shrew in the leaves.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:35:22 pm

Good use of the comma within your extract Lucy. Well done!

Kate

28/11/2014 01:48:28 am

I was in my grandmas pumpkin patch, with loads of leafs. Some how, I then saw a squirrel but it never ran. It came to me but when I stepped out it ran away. Then I went away,but as the leaves rustled,the squirrel came back. The garden was big but their was no playing part. Only flowers! I then put my hand in my pocket and I had some nuts. My stomach was rumbling. Shall I eat them or shall I give them away? That is my dilemma! Don't give them, but I have to, I was thinking.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:36:14 pm

Well done Kate. This is a lovely piece of work.

beau

28/11/2014 07:21:28 pm

The leaves rustled,
The twigs danced in the wind,
The branches held up the twigs in delight,
But the trunk stood still like a statue,
And the people stared at the whole tree.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:37:59 pm

I like how you have included a simile. Remember to include all of the challenge words and achieve that 100 word challenge.

Guy

28/11/2014 10:33:21 pm

Hello my name is Adam and I am trying to see Santa , Reindeers and his sleigh ,I feel like it's my destiny to spot him. I am prepared I have cookies , camera and binoculars it's going to be a long dark night . The stars are twinkling brightly this is perfect condition for trying to see Santa . But as the leaves rustled an green,small and strong Elfs came out with Santa they were caring both small and huge presents with bows on. He came inside and said to me come sit on my knee so you know I am real stop looking for me!

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:39:14 pm

You have used punctuation for effect and begun to use commas within your work Guy.

Josh!

28/11/2014 10:46:22 pm

It was one dull dark day.All the leaves were scattered throughout the garden and we were inside enjoying ourselves by putting our Christmas decorations up tinsel was placed on the fireplace, baubles were hung on the dark green prickly tree, crackers were stored in the kitchen cupboard.But as the leaves rustled a huge amount of leaves formed themselves
into a whirlwind.At once I rushed past the bauble tower, slipped my coat and shoes on and sprinted towards the mini whirlwind and left my mam to put all the decorations up by herself.Oh golly I am going to have the best time ever!!!!!!
HAVE FUN IN THE LEAVES ‼‼‼‼

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:39:41 pm

Well done Josh, this is a good attempt.

Jessica

28/11/2014 11:50:57 pm

One autumn day, I went for a walk through the dry leaves in the park but as the leaves rustled below my feet I saw a small hegehog crawling out of the bush on the side of the path! I was so shocked because I had never seen one before. When I got back home I told my mam what I had seen. So the very next day we went
back to where I had seen the hedgehog to see if it was
there again to show my little brother;but unfortunately
there was no sign at all of it.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:40:19 pm

Good work Jessica. Keep it up!

Katie

29/11/2014 04:12:21 am

"Mam, can we go geo-caching today?" I asked.
"Good idea" mam replied.
We got ready, which didn't take long!
I thought to myself.......remember the clue, which finds the geo-cache treasure, which read...the holly and the ivy, which grows next to the old oak tree, that has stood for hundreds of years.
Marc followed the co-ordinates carefully, where we found the exact spot. The hunt began!
I looked and spotted the tree and holly bush, which was green and prickly. The leaves were various colours. I kicked them but as the leaves rustled I was astonished to find the geo-cache camaflaged at the edge.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:40:54 pm

Well done Katie. You have included speech marks and an ellipsis.

Matthew

29/11/2014 06:26:21 pm

As I walked through the the woods I kicked the leaves at the walking trees and then one of the trees started chasing me I screamed aaaarrrr ...! The never give up I was tired but I had to keep running the tree got faster but as the leaves rustled the other trees thought I was kicking leaves at them so they started chasing me I nearly fell over because I was running so fast but I kept my balance soon the trees stopped I was glad. Thats enough of that I said to my self. I went home to peace and quiet.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:41:45 pm

Good effort Matthew. You gave included character thoughts/ feelings within your work.

Caitlin

29/11/2014 08:02:47 pm

One day as I walked though the park I stood on some leaves but as the leaves rustled I noticed their was a deep hole underneath them and from the hole came a scary echo then popped out was a hedgehog, then another, in the end out came a whole family of little prickly hedgehogs. Then I went back to my garden to find some slugs and put them in a bucket to take them to the brown hedgehog family. I quickly drop one in each mouth and they go back down in their little home and so did I.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:42:10 pm

Well done Caitlin.

Ethan

29/11/2014 10:05:25 pm

When I was walking down the path I went through leaves, but as the leaves rustled I saw Danny walk up the path with is brouther Ben it was seaned at shildon were my dad has a game shop, which has any game in the world.At the park I a scooter and Danny did as but when we got to the park it was closed so we went home but I still don't no how the park was closed.But still it was a good day in shildon.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:44:19 pm

A good attempt Ethan. Don't forget to check back through your work to make sure all sentences make sense.

Madelene

30/11/2014 01:16:39 am

As i walked through the damp and misty grave yard I thought to myself what would it be like to be dead and fly around and haunt people leaves rustled I realized that soon enough I will die so I should make the most of it now. Suddenly faster then lightning could strike a white floating man flew past me. Leaving me covered in white goo! Then a green woman leaving me covered with green goo! and they said "you have stole something that belongs to us until you give it back you will come with us."nooooo" I screamed.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:44:50 pm

Well done Madelene. This is a lovely piece of work.

The fantastic Sadie

30/11/2014 02:24:10 am

It was a dark Sunday night and nearly December. As I sat staring at my computer thinking of what to do for my hundred word challenge, my Dad came in and gave me some ideas. Most of them were rather boring. Suddenly an amazing idea popped into my head. I decided to take the dog out for a walk instead!
All through the estate there were beautiful twinkling Christmas lights. After a while I noticed that Millie, my dog, was missing. I got worried and searched everywhere. I shouted her name loudly BUT AS THE LEAVES RUSTLED she came running out from behind a tree.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:45:32 pm

Interesting name. Did you change it? Well done Sadie. You have included a range of openers.

Joe

30/11/2014 04:26:08 am

Minecraft Revenge

Once there was a minecraft player named Cookiemaster, he had just started the world, he hasn't a clue what is ahead of him, he should remember his last world where he got killed straight away by zombies. All was quiet BUT AS THE LEAVES RUSTLED he realised there was a mob of zombies behind him, he ran for his life. As soon as he escaped it was morning which was good. He went off to explore, he eventually made it to a village. He found sticks diamonds and string. He made a bow, sword and diamond armour with a golden helmet and no chest plate.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:46:01 pm

Good work Joe. You have included the words within your hobby.

Luke.p

30/11/2014 04:36:40 am

One gloomy morning the wind was blowing swiftly. My dad and I had to travel all the way to seaton Carew to play a football match. It was so freezing it felt like my fingers were going to drop off anyway, I kept on playing until the game ended the final score was 3-0 to us with spectacular goals from me Danny and Robbie.On the way back in the car we drove home as soon as we arived back home and I got out of the car. But AS THE LEAVES RUSTLED I ran over to here them.Once i had heard them rustle I sprinted inside as fast as I could because it was really cold out there.When I got inside were it was warm I thought about how good my team played today.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:46:34 pm

Good work Luke. You have begun to use commas within your writing.

Jamie-lee

1/12/2014 02:51:31 am

On Saturday morning I decided to take my dog for a walk in the bright coloured woods. As I walked through the brown crunching leaves, I had an idea I started collecting the leaves so I could make a collage when I arrived home. I had all different kinds of leaves in all different colours, shapes and sizes. I walked further and further into the enchanted woods...but as the leaves rustled...I heard an astonishing sound! It was a hedgehog I just remembered I had my camera in my coat pocket, I quickly grabbed it out I captured an amazing picture. When I got home I used the leaves I had collected to make my collage and I put my amazing picture of the hedgehog in the middle.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:47:27 pm

Good work Jamie-Lee. You have used punctuation for effect and tried to build drama within your writing.

Robbie

1/12/2014 04:32:15 am

One Sunday afternoon my granda came over our house to go in the forest with Neve and my two cousin's Alfie and Lily.We started going through the horses field after we got out the horse field, at the other end we crept through the forest then as the leaves rustled we saw a headhog we did not disturb it so we creept away quietly.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:48:12 pm

Good work Robbie. Short but included the challenge words.

Neve

1/12/2014 04:38:20 am

Winter is here and the garden is covered in a blanket of crispy brown leaves and I had been shopping for some new Wellington boots, whilst my dad had been gathering the leaves up. But the only problem is my pet hedgehog lives under the leaves so I call " STOP" to my dad and as quickly as I could I put my new Wellington boots on without taking the tag off and run over to discuss that my hedgehogs habitat is the leaves. I searched all over he was lost but as the leaves rustled there he was I was so happy he was back!

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:49:00 pm

A really good piece of work Neve. You have included technical vocabulary in your writing.

Luke. D

1/12/2014 04:43:22 am

One day I heard a rumour about if you sneak across the forest you would earn a prize, but if you were heard you would be chased by a wood cutter.So now I heard that rumor I wanted to find out if it was true. I strolled in to the dark misty forest I crept through, with half way to go, but as the leaves rustled I got really scared that I was going to be heard but just then the leaves crunched really loudly beneath my feet then I heard chop chop chop!!! I realised It was the wood cutter!!!
I ran for my life ...

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:50:14 pm

Well done Luke. You have used a wide range of punctuation within your writing.

Kayleigh

2/12/2014 01:39:24 am

A little girl named Daffodil loved tapping away on her iPad, but one day her mum said. 'get out to the garden and enjoy yourself your not going to be lazy!' so Daffodil went out to the garden and she walked over to the big, oak tree, which had lots of leaves on it.
(two months later)
She was playing in the leaves, until

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:50:47 pm

Good work Kayleigh. You have included speech and brackets within your writing.

Kayleigh

2/12/2014 01:44:43 am

sorry the first screen froze. leaves colling around her. She thought this was ondary, but as the leaves rustled she was sucked into the LEGO world.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:51:03 pm

No problem

Danny

2/12/2014 03:02:12 am

But as the leaves rustled everything went quiet in salmour street, you couldn't here anything until... A HUGE! Earthquake thumped the ground, it destroyed people homes the environment, suddenly a tornado came over, it wasn't just a normal tornado it was a fire tornado. People were shoved in it getting magnified,I heard everything. Then I went outside to have a battle with the weather people were encouraging me to win and then until I defeated them I won 50'000'000,0000 cash.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:52:14 pm

Interesting story Danny! Well done for including an ellipsis. Check where you put the exclamation mark. It must always be at the end of the sentence.

Henry

2/12/2014 03:09:19 am

On Saturday I was racing through the forest on my mountain bike. As I was speeding past the trees I noticed my suspension felt different so I said to my friends 'you go on ahead I'll meet back at the car park'. Carefully I dismounted and bent down for a closer look. Having decided to take a slow stroll I noticed a big pile of leaves BUT AS THE LEAVES RUSTLED a angry bagger jumped out at me and growled viciously. His pupils narrowed as if to say step off. Terrified, I turned and ran clinging anxiously on to my bike and made it to safety.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:52:38 pm

Well done Henry. Keep it up!

Daniel Wilson

2/12/2014 04:29:42 am

It's autumn the red, orange, green and gold leaves fall off the dark green trees and never stop only at the end autumn. Then we have winter but before we talk about winter we can get more in to autumn,.Autumn is where all the leaves fall off all of the trees and its a beautiful season, better than winter. It isn't better than summer ,because summer is one of the best and hottest seasons and in autumn the sounds were nice but as the leafs rustled, which is the worst sound in autumn.

Mr Turner

4/12/2014 10:53:15 pm

A very informative piece of writing Daniel.

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