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The prompt this week is five words, all of which need to be in your writing. It doesn't matter what order they come in but they must all be there. The words are:
Sandwich Grey Miserable Hyena Climb Have a lovely weekend!
32 Comments
Josh!
6/2/2015 12:26:08 am
On Friday it was a grey miserable day and we had a family reunitation and had tea at our house ,soon it was time for tea we had sandwiches fruits and lots of delicious goodies for desert and before we even got there grandad Chris ate all the cakes I said " why do you have to be such a hyena immediately he ran outside and tried to climb over the garden FENCE! I said back ha ha you've eaten to much!!i said In a jolly tone and we both walked inside laughing the evening away!!
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 10:11:44 pm
Well done Josh! You have included speech marks within your writing,
Guy
6/2/2015 01:52:51 am
Hello my name is Jack today is the holidays and I'm going to CLIMB a GREY cliff. I need to take a couple of things with me,a packed lunch,gloves and a helmet. So let's begin. When I looked up,the sky looked MISERABLE,the cliff was crooked at one point I lost my grip,my hands were clinging onto the old rocks for dear life. I pulled my self up and I thought it was a perfect time for my ham SANDWICH out of my packed lunch. When I reached the top I was laughing like a HYENA!
Mr Turner
12/2/2015 11:03:29 pm
Well done Guy! Thanks for highlighting the key words in bold. You have used a wide range of punctuation.
Jessica I
6/2/2015 08:56:20 pm
Today me and my family were going to CLIMB a mountain in Wales! It took us a hour and a half to get there. Finally, we had reached the mountain we were going to climb. My brother, Declan, was MISERABLE because he didn't like heights! Half way up the mountain we saw a HYENA which was GREY. I was surprised because hyenas haven't been seen in Wales before! At the top we had ham sandwiches for dinner; they were delicious!
Mr Turner
13/2/2015 12:34:39 am
An interesting idea Jessica. I never knew hyenas were in Wales either! You have included a semi-colon.
Ethan
7/2/2015 02:21:23 am
At mid day in the forest I saw a hyena climing up a tree with a sandwich in its mouth.When I looked up I saw a grey cloued passing by. I won't to go home so I feel miserable so my mam said why don't we go for a subway at tindlcrossing.After my subway I felt a lot better.At home my brouther Finley was playing on his tablet on Angry Birds.
Mr Turner
13/2/2015 12:35:42 am
A good effort Ethan. You have written this as a recount adding thoughts/ feelings. Please check your tense as you have switched from past to present and back again.
Lucy
7/2/2015 05:15:46 pm
One sunny morning, all the hyenas were out roaming the land. Mum decided that we would go on a picnic but I said no because it was getting quite miserable. Then mum said how about we go for a climb I wasn't up for it! Then I suggested we could bring sandwiches with us to!so when I told my mum it was to late she had already gone but just then I saw dad I asked him he only said she's going shopping. I was very curious of what had happened so I asked dad for a lift it was grey outside!
Lucy's 2
7/2/2015 05:25:35 pm
One sunny morning, all the hyenas were out roaming the land. Mum decided that we would go on a picnic. I said no as it was getting quite miserable. Then mum said, "how about we go for a climb?"I wasn't up for that! I suggested we could bring sandwiches with us! When I told my mum it was to late she had already gone! Just then I saw dad and I asked him, he only said she's going shopping. I was very curious to where my mum had gone so I asked dad for a lift as the sky was grey outside!
Mr Turner
13/2/2015 12:38:10 am
Well done Lucy. It's good to see you checked back through your work and made changes. You have included speech marks and been able use a comma to denote a clause.
Kate
7/2/2015 05:52:30 pm
Yesterday I was approaching boots in Darlington with my friend Katy. When I saw this free climbing trip! You could have your family and 1 friend. Katy and I stared at it for ages until my phone started to ring, I answered it. I heard a man saying that I'd won a trip. Where? I asked myself. It could be to see my favourite animal, hyenas. But the sky looked grey and so miserable. My mum phoned me up. I answered it. She asked if I had been ok. I asked if she would come and have sandwiches for lunch.
Mr Turner
13/2/2015 12:40:02 am
Well done Kate. I'm impressed with the effort you have put in. I like the mixture of short and long sentences. It really builds on the story.
Caitlin
7/2/2015 06:32:25 pm
On a misarible day a grey hyena jumped out of the bush and climed on the human to get the sandwich. Then the human ran after the hyena up the huge slippy mounting. The grey hyena stipped and the human grabbed the sandwich and ran back down the mounting to the tree house,which was very high so they started to hunt for food like fruit and maybe animal meat when they found what they needed want so they went back to the tree house but then a hynea from somewhere jump out and pinched all of the food the human had. Then it went on and on till on of them died
Mr Turner
13/2/2015 12:41:41 am
Good work Caitlin. You have used a range of adjectives to describe the object. You have also included commas within your writing. Think about what other punctuation you could add to your writing.
Caitlin
24/2/2015 04:33:57 am
Thank you Mr turner!
Cobi
7/2/2015 06:41:55 pm
As the war broke out in the Sahara desert the skies were GREY and MISRABLE, the sand was swirling all over. I am hoping to see some animals but I am desperate to see and hear the laughing HYENA. As we carried on walking the sand was hitting our faces, although the sky was grey the sand was really warm, it was like having a radiator in the Antarctic. I was so looking forward to a rest place, I was hungry and tired as was everyone else. We were so looking forward to our jam SANDWICH, water and small chocolate bar. The CLIMB was our next mission.
Mr Turner
13/2/2015 12:42:56 am
A good attempt Cobi. Try not to drift between both the past and present tenses. I like how you have included a short sentence at the end, as to build on from here.
neve
7/2/2015 07:15:54 pm
I think I should be chosen for junior vets on call because I adore animals and I would like to be in the position of helping them. I like to learn and achieve new things, I always give 100%! I am outgoing and have a cheerful personality. I am willing to try any job I get asked to do. Also I am up for the challenge even if I am not keen on what I have to do! I am good and have skills for working in a team but also I can work independently. I like to of me like a sociable. I AM REALLY EXCITED.
Just Sadie this week!
8/2/2015 12:51:15 am
I was doing some research on my third favourite animal, a HYENA. For some reason I didn’t want to do research about my first and second favourite animals, which are Dogs and Wolves. I found out that Hyenas are always laughing and can CLIMB up a range of tall mountains without running out of breath. After I had done my research I headed downstairs to get myself a snack. Mam had made me a cheese SANDWICH. It was delicious! I wanted to go out and play on my GREY electric scooter but the weather was MISERABLE so I decided to read my new book instead.
Jamie-lee
8/2/2015 02:27:56 am
I'm bored! Mum suggested we went to the zoo, but there was no way I was going back there after what happened last time. Mum and dad were at work so I had to go with my gran, but I wasn't allowed to look at the HYENAs because gran had a surprising fear of hyenas. Meanwhile when we sat down to eat our SANDWICHS, the hyenas could smell them. Sandwiches are a very popular dish to hyenas. As soon as we took the sandwiches out of the containers they were stored in, the hyenas CLIMBED over the large steel metal fence, and nearly gave my gran a heart attack!!!!!
Beau
8/2/2015 04:34:32 am
What a miserable day thought Emily! It was one of those days in the summer holidays in Egypt. She just couIn't find something to do. It was extremely hot and she could see little specs of grey dust combined with the sand.
Beau
8/2/2015 04:35:09 am
Sorry wrong one
Beau
8/2/2015 03:54:12 pm
"What a miserable, grey day" said Emily's mum. "I wonder what we could do on a day like this? Have you got any ideas Emily?" "We could make each other laugh?" "What a great idea!" Said mum looking pleased. So they went upstairs to collect different things to make each other chuckle. First Emily went up stairs and climbed to the top of her bunk bed. She picked up a hellium pump and ran back down stairs. Whilst mum however couldn't find anything so she picked up a bottle with nothing in it and went down stairs. When they heard each other they laughed like hyenas. Afterward they ate sandwiches and then decided to have a rest.
Katie
9/2/2015 01:10:22 am
Rosie was laughing, she sounded like a giggling HYENA, ha,ha,ha!
bethany
9/2/2015 02:04:19 am
MY 100 WORD CHALLENGE
Henry
9/2/2015 03:30:03 pm
I was coming out of the skatepark and my dad and I heard police sirens in the distance so my dad said to CLIMB over the fence to see what is happening. There are lots of cars parked up so I couldn't quite see what was actually happening! My dad said to go over there to see what is happening but I was to scared to because there was a HYENA eating the cars he was starting on a GREY car. The MISERABLE HYENA looked at me and licked his chops so I ran away back to my dad! And my dad said because you can't get back through the traffic that we should have a big SANDWICH !!!!
Luke D
10/2/2015 03:58:28 am
One grey miserable day me and my family were at the zoo. First we started walking around looking in some large cages full of different kinds of birds, it was really good looking and finding out about different types of animals. After about 2 hours I was getting really tired so I sat on a green wooden bench for a rest and a bite to eat. I went to get my sandwich out my backpack but it was gone I said "who's took my sandwich ?" I heard a cheeky laugh behind me when I looked it was a hyena with my SANDWICH!!! The hyena went to climb back into its cage but I grabbed it and snatched the sandwich and ate it right in front of its face.
Kayleigh
10/2/2015 04:19:22 am
Daffodil fanaly reached home, but it was not like normal. Instead of a picture of a HYENA climbing,, in its place they was a picture of common birds. Her mum was eating a sandwich at a small table. She said 'I lost my job. I'm unemployed' and daffodil said 'I've got a dog called red' but red could cope with the gray, miserable house...
Luke.p
10/2/2015 05:15:36 am
One morning my mam said to me what a grey miserable day it's so dark and cold. So We stayed in and later that day I read a really really really big book all about a laughing hyena. Once I had read through my basic information book I had to answer a few questions. I then decided to play out side with all of my friends as it brightened up a. Bit we all played blocky and I had some sandwiches at my friends house for lunch, my friends and I were trying to climb a great big oak tree it was really fun but then I had to go home because my dad had finished work and picked me up to go to football training.
Matthew
15/2/2015 03:04:13 am
Sandwich grey miserable hyena climb
Evie-mae
16/2/2015 06:27:41 pm
One day I went out with my family to the zoo and I saw what I had never seen before! A HYENA!Well I thorght that i had never seen one but they all said I did... A MISERABLE monkey threw a half eaten SAMWICH at me, which has bite marks on,and he scrowled of all alone. Next their was a small insect who had to CLIMB up a long stick and was not tired after,it was a GRAY,small insect with only 2 legs. Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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