100 word challenge #1

4/9/2014

Welcome back to school, my new Year 5. Each week we will be completing 100 word challenges in order to improve our writing. Please look back through previous challenges from last year to understand what is expected from you.

The first prompt of the year is:

… finally we can make a start…

You must use the prompt as it is written and only use 100 words making 106 altogether.

Good Luck!

43 Comments

Mr Turner

3/9/2014 06:27:55 pm

Test 1

Guy

5/9/2014 01:24:51 am

This is Guy Barker reporting for the news at 5pm, finally we can make a start of recording our bulletin. It looks like a huge cream egg coming down to Earth at the speed of light but obviously facts show it is the biggest meteor in the galaxy. Early yesterday morning the huge meteor crashed on a small hill but every one thought it was the end of the world but it was in fact a cream egg! We have got a major problem on our hands the hole of the county is covered in cream egg and people are stuck in their homes,unable to go to work and school.

matthew

5/9/2014 04:07:44 am

finally can we make a start to play a game of tag before the bell goes ,in class there was new so we all got up and met every one then we sat down for our first task literacy writing about your summer holidays time flew over because they enjoyed writing it next task maths it was hard addition they were working on the first question for ages then they did it together on the white board then it was dinner time it rushed over playing and talking then it was art it felt like five minutes because its fun then everyone could go home.

kate

4/9/2014 03:03:32 am

I had a friend her name was Brittany,she is very nice friend, she is starting to in a coffee shop that had been busy after the past couple of weeks.well I work there as well but we just joined so finally we can make a start to it I phoned Brittany but she never answerd,I was really worried she might have been taken by aliens but how would she believe in aliens no its really odd.I was confusied she always answers the phonewhy does your life have to be so difficult so I'll call her again that'll be the last time I call her today for now.

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 05:54:55 am

A lovely effort Kate. I like that you have begun to include commas within your writing in an attempt to denote a clause. Could we try to focus on adding punctuation next time?

kate

7/9/2014 05:07:35 am

next time i will add in more punctuation

kayleigh

4/9/2014 03:06:46 am

"Finally we can make a start!" I cried when I stepped into the new classroom. firstly we did all the important stuff in two lessons. I felt excited because I like this sort of stuff. Then we had lunch my favorite part of the day, because the sandwiches mammy makes me. After lunch I did a mood graph, I felt happy at the time because its new. But the Topic lesson was a bit unexpected! we had to play this game called Poc a toc, I didn't like it, but at least it was better then writing! this is my 106 word challenge I hope you enjoyed it

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 05:56:55 am

A very honest opinion Kayleigh, I like it! I really like the range of openers you have included and how you have included complex sentences within your writing. Keep it up!

evie-mae

4/9/2014 03:09:37 am

It's the start of school when everyone hover's over me to check if I have anything to share. We line up smartly after the bell rings loudly. Silently we march up to the year 5 classroom as soon as our teacher picks us up. Smiling sarcastically at the board that has some maths on that look hard. I started thinking will the work be harder in year 5. At break time my friends and I played until we had to go back to class. Yey, art my favorite lesson we waited ages and then it began I said ''finially we can make a start''

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 05:59:33 am

A fab start to your 100 word challenges Evie-Mae. I like how you have included speech marks and added a wider range of openers within your writing. Could we try and focus on our punctuation for the next challenge?

beau

4/9/2014 03:15:59 am

One day a girl called Victoria decided she wanted a tree house for her birthday but she wanted to help make it. As soon as she told her parents they disapproved which actually came as a surprise to Victoria as her parents didn't say no to many things but this apparently was a definite no. Not on my watch the thought to her self so she threw herself on to the floor and started to wail! 'Ok ok you can have a tree house' they said. They ordered the wood and 'finally we can make a start she said to her dad' after they had finished it looked brilliant.

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:02:31 am

Well done Beau. This is a really good effort. I like that you have included speech and have used a range of openers. Could we begin to include commas within our sentences to further develop them and allow for that little breath whilst reading.

Neve

4/9/2014 03:25:42 am

On Saturday my mum and I decided to bake a cake but we didn't have the right ingredients. We then made a list of what we needed before we went to the shops. A few minutes later we arrived at Asda, for our chocolate cake the essentials we needed were: chocolate, eggs, butter, sugar and for the decoration we needed sugar icing, sprinkles and pink crystals.

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:09:46 am

A good effort Neve. This is a great piece of writing that includes a good range of openers and a comma to denote a clause. However, we are missing one thing... the prompt. You may have accidentally pressed send before this as I believe your writing was building towards its conclusion.

Robbie

4/9/2014 03:35:20 am

Finally we can make a start with our football game. we where playing wilington at the tech field we had to be there 10:30 for kick off at 11:00. When we got there we started warming up befor the game. Suddenly we all realised that the referee was missing ! At last he arrived it was 11:10 and finally our game could begin. It was a fast game and played left wing. I scored two goals they where wonder goals. The final score was Willington 3 St Mary's 3 and I was awarded man if the match.

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:13:05 am

A good effort Robbie! I am pleased to see that you have added punctuation within your writing, Please check through for spelling mistakes and if you can add any commas within your work to allow it to flow.

lucy

4/9/2014 03:40:12 am

the next day Madelene had to go to school it was her first day in year five she was extremely exited.Mr turner said hello and he went through all the names when it came to Madelene she said in a low voice "hi" he couldn't hear so he put her as ill and then she said "i'm here" so he put her at school.when they came in from play Mr turner had a laugh with the class Madelene wanted to say to Mr turner said "yes Madelene" please finlly can we make a start to our work she replied "lets begin" Guy shouted.they started on music they did every song they did in year 4.they finished the lesson and ended the whole day they said "bye" to each other and missed each other through out the night.

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:15:32 am

A good attempt Lucy. I like that you have incorporated speech within your writing and that it is linked to school life. Could we please focus on our capital letters for the next piece.

lucy

7/9/2014 05:05:22 am

ok thank you

Bethany

4/9/2014 03:50:01 am

Mr Turner can we wright our 100 word challange or do we have to wright it on the computer only

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:16:40 am

Hi Bethany. You can write the 100 word challenges if you like but we will still need to upload them in class so that I have a permanent record. Thanks!

Jessica

4/9/2014 05:23:02 am

Mr Turner lumbered into his old, ripped chair waiting for the class to be quiet. He counted down from five expecting us to be silent. By the time he had counted to three we were all quiet."Finally we can make a start on our English lesson,We will be learning about mood graphs today", Mr Turner told us. "Are we all ok with that?" Mr Turner asked loudly strolling around the class room. "Yes sir" we all replied "Lets start then" By the time it was break time we were all finished so we rushed out side for break. Minewhile Mr Turner checked our work.

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:22:55 am

An excellent piece of writing Jessica. I'm delighted how you have managed to recall real events in a way that flows so well. Try to use your pronouns rather than repeating. For example Mr Turner did this, then he did that.

Luke.D.

4/9/2014 06:04:25 am

I fancy going on a bike ride, do you to? What will we need? First we need a bike of course, make sure you have not got any punctures in your tyres, if you do make sure you have a puncture repair kit to fix it. Now you will have to have a backpack to fit all of your equipment in like a pump, a snack (if you get hungry) a water bottle and a coat. Always check your chain and brakes! Finally don't forget to wear your safety helmet never forget it will keep you safe. Finally we can make a start. Let's go!

Mr Turner

4/9/2014 06:25:12 am

Well done Luke! You have included a wide range of punctuation including the use of parenthesis (brackets) within your writing. I like how you have included a mixture of short and longer sentences within this extract.

Katie

5/9/2014 05:40:25 am

Finally we can make a start on my baby brothers bedroom. Firstly we bought items from our shopping list which included blankets, bed sheets, a cot, wardrobe, chest of drawers, toy chest and a light. When we arrived home I helped my stepdad build the cot by passing him screws and the screwdriver because he was holding the pieces of wood together. "You have been a good help Katie" said Marc. Next I helped my mam put on the white clean covers on the cot and also the blanket. Finally I made a special present for my brother which was a picture on a dinosaur that I sewed onto a pillow. At last his room was finished and I loved it!

Caitlin

5/9/2014 07:10:13 pm

I cannot wait because when my Dad comes home he is going to take me to the football. The match is going to be played at the Riverside Stadium in Middlesbrough. Middlesbrough are going to play Brentford. Before the match we walk into town to meet my grandma and go and get some lunch. Grandma likes going to football too! We will go to the pub so my Dad can meet his friends and have a mucky beer, I have some orange juice. We will then go to the stadium. The front door opens, its my Dad, finally we can make a start "COME ON BORO!"

Sadie

5/9/2014 08:57:19 pm

While I was eating my breakfast Dad had an idea ''lets all go on a bike ride", he cried. I looked outside and it was raining but dad said it will stop soon so we got everything ready. It had just stopped raining,"finally we can make a start" ,I cheered. We checked our tyres,the brakes and the bell and then we were off. We cycled along the old disused railway track all the way to Spennymoor which is where my Granny and Grandad live. I had a drink then we set off back home. The sun was now shining and the birds were singing

kody

6/9/2014 07:30:44 am

Hi this is kody reporting from bbc news talking about year 5 starting a new blog called 5Escombweelbly over to you Mr turner. This is Mr turner reporting at Escomb primary school before I say anything finnay we are starting again yes im the person who sets up all the blogs. I made a world cup blog up I made a year 6 blog up and made a year 3 blog up. All of my children are asking two put my picture up like all the other have any way back to you kody. So there we go a bit about Escomb school on there blog weal be catching up to date with tomorrow from then bye.

Ethan

6/9/2014 07:04:01 pm

Finally we can make a start , after an exhausting summer holiday. For my holiday this summer I stayed on a caravan site right next to the beach at St Bees. We stayed there for four nights. When we were there we walked up a humongous hill, it was a bit tiring when we got to the top, but it was a fantastic view. The best bit about my holiday was that i could ride my bike around the site and go on the beach. I am excited about going on the ipads and nervous at the same time about being in year five because it will be hard work.

Josh

6/9/2014 10:40:53 pm

It was a lovely day on the 9th august 2014 my birthday and my grandma ,grandad, sister and I were all going to Carlisle airport for stobart fest my favourite trucks . We woke up very early and got dressed very quickly whilst grandma made the lunch . Once we had conquered the traffic we were back on our way . When we had arrived after our 2 hour journey finnaly we can make a start to an epic day . About half way through the day I met my favourite trucker from Eddie stobart his name is mark Dixon and drives a truck called pheobe grace

madelene

6/9/2014 11:40:59 pm

Ok class today we are going to talk about the Mayans “Stacy is annoying me “Abby cried “eek” there’s a giant black hairy spider in my tray “Rachel screamed “I’ll get rid of it Rachel stop screaming” “look everyone a red squirrel” said Sadie everybody ran quietly over to the window where Sadie was standing “wow “everyone gasped in amazement “ sit down class, they sensibly walked back to their seats “Mr. Turner I am desperate for the toilet “ Lizzie yelled two minutes and I want you back here. Two minutes past “I‘m back” “OK “ said Mr. Turner finally we can make a start.

daniel

7/9/2014 05:03:16 am

We were on holiday in skegness in July and the car broke down ,my mam was upset and was on the phone to the garage nearly all morning trying to get the car fixed.We had to stay on the campsite for four days because we didnt have a car to go anywhere. We played on our bikes and over the park but we were getting bored. Then we got a call from the garage to say our car was fixed we were so happy and my mam said "finally we can make a start on our holiday " . After we got the car back we all had a great time .

joe

7/9/2014 05:22:39 am

Bethany

8/9/2014 02:49:32 am

On the way to football we were running late because we got caught in the traffic,But when we arrived my coach Ian said now that your hear Bethany we can finally make a start.So i ran onto the pitch and waited until kick-off.The game had finally kicked-off and we had scored our first goal by my best friend Mia and then i scored,my sister ruby scored a goal thanks to my mam and brothers cheering us on ,and on the way back we went to mcdonalds ,hear i am doing my homework.

joe

8/9/2014 05:59:28 am

Once in the wild west of lego land there was an evil sheriff, who kept all the bandits loot to himself. Dynamite Joey saw the sheriff through his binoculars locking the loot away. Dynamite Joey decided to do something about it. He shot like a supersonic bullet down to the saloon. Bruce Brown was there playing cards. Joey shouted "the sheriff has been stealing the loot, finally we can make a start on building a new leader". Lazy Bruce said "we? Don't you mean you?". Dynamite Joey built a super bandit and an ultimate battering ram to defeat the evil sheriff using his awesome building skills.

Luke p

8/9/2014 06:24:47 am

Finally we can get started in the new season for St Mary's under 10's Aces as we have all been given our new fixtures for 2014/2015 unfortunately our first game we have a free week and our first game is away against Wynyard village in a cup game our whole team is very excited and enthusiastic and been training really hard with pre season friendlys. And finally the Hartlepool development training has been relocated to King James at Bishop Auckland on

Jamie Lee

9/9/2014 02:07:30 am

First we had to find somebody to decorate my baby cousins bedroom. Finlay we found someone his name was Ken.A couple of days later Ken came and knocked on the door we greeted him in the hallway.he came with a portable radio all of his decorating tools Ken walked up stairs first he decorated my bedroom and then he got started on my cousins room.

Niall

9/9/2014 02:32:55 am

"Finally we can make a start" I said as I entered my new classroom I was so exited to start again and make new friends.I really hope our new teacher (mr.turner) is kind. It's sunny but it is still a bit cold, i have revived a new tray name it has a big green googly eye. more recently i have been learning about the Mayans it is brilliant fun we even played pok a tok, the first ever sport,.anyway I really enjoyed my first day back at school.

George

9/9/2014 05:37:40 pm

Easter came and lots of eggs. As I opened one of my cream eggs I dropped it on the floor. It broke in half, it looked like a river of cream. Then a few little men appeared, I couldn't believe it, they put some cones around it, this was to protect it I guessed. Suddenly I shrunk and I was one of the little men. It was so much fun. I helped the little men to clean up the egg and then I was back to my normal size.

Jamie-Lee

14/9/2014 02:56:48 am

I went to Nanna and Grandad's caravan at Witton Castle. The peacocks live there so we went for a walk to find the feathers of a peacock. The first feather we found was a long brown feather that they have underneath their beautiful coloured feathers. Altogether we found thirteen different peacock feathers. Some of them where the same but we found a selection of them. My favourites were the one which looked liked an owl feather. The other one was an original peacock feather with the eye on it. I also liked another feather which was black with little strips of blue inside. Those were most of the different feathers we found on our walk. They all felt so soft and delicate. When we were walking back we saw a peacock it had beautiful feathers they were all different shapes and sizes. The peacock walked up a big hill and three stone steps to get up to the top of the castle , as there were some steps missing the peacock flew onto the top of the castle. We walked back and a lady helped us find some more feathers.

Henry

14/9/2014 11:59:50 pm

..."finally we can make a start"...I said to the instructor as my wheel rolled closer to the edge .I had waited a long time for this moment. I had saved up all my pocket money and earned more by doing jobs and washing cars. Eventually I bought myself a stunt scooter and some lessons. I was going to tackle the biggest rap in Dynamix skate park:The death slide. Quickly I pushed off with one foot and swiftly placed it on the board. At first I lost my balance but once I gained speed I stabilised. I zoomed off hurtling towards the foam pit.

Cobi

15/9/2014 06:47:43 am

One of my best friends was bullied for having a hobby he really enjoyed, he was a singer who loved to sing, the bullies were crule and nastie to him, picking on him calling him horrible names but he still sang and sang. He enter the X Factor and sung his favourite song " Finally we can make a start" he won yippee the bullies left him alone and he continued to sing to show the bullies he would never give up and to teach them that they never scared him because he loved to sing and it was a great song.

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