ESCOMB YEAR 5 CLASS BLOG
'Growing and Learning Together'
  • Blog
  • About
  • E Safety

100 word challenge...

21/1/2014

49 Comments

 
Picture
Welcome to the 100 word challenge: Creative writing for young people.


Each week a prompt is given, which can be a picture or a series of individual words and we can use up to 100 words to write a creative piece of writing.


Check out this weeks...

This week we have a picture prompt. I want you to look really closely at it and get those imaginations working. What can you see and what do they mean?

Make sure you use your most creative words. Read over your work so that you check that you are posting your very best!

Good Luck!

49 Comments
Ben s
21/1/2014 04:28:31 am

Good idea :-()

Reply
Ben s mum
21/1/2014 04:44:53 am

That is a really good idea the blog is amazing &)

Reply
Ben s
21/1/2014 04:50:33 am

THE BLOG IS AWSOME (8-)

Reply
Zak
21/1/2014 04:26:39 pm

That's right

Reply
Ben s
21/1/2014 05:17:30 am

Cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool

Reply
Ben
22/1/2014 01:40:48 am

Doing the 500 word story I am half way in and shall bring it in tomorrow :-)

Reply
Rachel
22/1/2014 01:48:41 am

it is a realy good idior and it willget us into the writing mood

Reply
Ben
22/1/2014 02:30:44 am

I have a story that is 230 words I will bring it in tomorrow it tuke me 25 mins and is about a vampire no secrets to give away you will have to read it your self and all spelling are right for the first time from me

Reply
Millie
22/1/2014 02:34:28 am

It always crept me out that shed. Ramshackled, abandoned and deserted it doesn't get any freakier. I remember the day when I faced my fears. Outside rows of cracked spruce wood were lined up on the floor. What looked like windows were shatted not only on the inside but on the outside too! Where I touched the door it felt soggy and damp but when I open the well what used to be a door it squeaks. Startles me. On the ceiling the light has been demolished, leaving rubble everywhere. Then on a bench were pink slippers. To be continued.

Reply
Mr Turner
22/1/2014 05:45:12 am

A good effort Millie; I like the use of adjectives to describe the shed. The phrase creeped me out would best fit in your work according to the definition at http://oaadonline.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/dictionary/creep_1. Well done!

Reply
Erin
22/1/2014 04:45:57 am

I slowly walked towards the old abandoned shed. I could see the reflection of the awful house behind me. My heart started thumping. I could see a young boy in the shed as I got closer. What was he doing here I thought to my self as I opened the shed door. I looked to the side of me and I saw a pink pair of shoes. I walked to wards the back of the shed were the boy laid. I gently shook. his eyes opened. he looked at me. what should I do?

Reply
Mr Turner
22/1/2014 05:58:18 am

Well done Erin; this is a lovely piece of writing. I like how you have begun to build tension and invite the reader into the drama. Try not to lose focus and miss capital letters out of our work.

Reply
Lauren
25/1/2014 06:15:17 pm

Hi have you read my description mr turner

Ben
22/1/2014 05:29:28 am

Finished the 500 word story and will bring it in :D
Ps.no giveaways :-)

Reply
Jake
22/1/2014 04:26:25 pm

Ok I'll read it and we will some more stories ben

Reply
lauren
23/1/2014 02:32:25 am

the old ,grubby, spider infested shack was leaning towards me like the leaning tower of pisa. I started to shake in fear, my heart was pounding like butterflies in a bag. A weird creature peered out of the murky window with quite a familiar face, like a family member ? A friend ? Who could it be? I walked extremely slowly widening my pace, as I dragged myself along the dusty road, thinking who it could be. My head was about to explode I felt like a leopard going to pounce on a gazelle. I grabbed a bat just outside the door it was quite a weird bat It was a wooden nobble ended bat . I opened the cranky door witch needed to be oiled and bang !!!!!!!!!

Reply
Mr Turner
26/1/2014 02:32:59 am

A lovely effort Lauren. I like the use of similes within your work and the fact you have questioned the reader... who could it be? Fab! Don't forget to use capital letters even when you are typing.

Reply
Ben
23/1/2014 02:33:44 am

Doing it now :-)

Reply
jo lauren's Grandma
23/1/2014 02:37:58 am

This blog is a really good idea as it gives children the opportunity of using their initiative to use their imaginations to explain a situation as they see it making it very dramatic.

Reply
isabelle
23/1/2014 04:51:10 am

Everyday day I stared out of the dusty window at the old rusty shed that gave me the creeps! One day I really wanted to face my fears and go in the old crooked shed that might colapes on my head.one sunny morning I was feeling very brave so I ran across my garden until I reached the dusty old shed.seconds later I got very scared and wonderd about what was going to happen.I thought about it and it really dosent look that bad, so I opend the crocked door and it made an awful shreick.










Reply
Mr Turner
26/1/2014 02:35:51 am

Good work Isabelle. I like how you have included the character's thoughts/ feelings within a short piece of writing. I also like the mystery behind the shed which a lot of you have written about. We could have maybe added an ellipsis to build further tension... and drama.

Reply
Ben
26/1/2014 01:03:08 am

In the old abandon cabin there was no sign of life except for A few dead spiders. The door was dropping water but not fresh water it was around one hundred years old and even looked red. Logs were falling smashing the ceiling it was smashed enough for rain to come through. The entire outside of the building was painted red and the inside was painted dark grey with the markings of planks. Years ago there was a family of humans but now there's a huge infestation of spiders and flys. When I was taking a look at it I heard the door slowly opening.

Reply
Mr Turner
26/1/2014 02:38:32 am

A good effort Ben. I like the fact that you have tried to add drama to your writing. I particularly like the opening sentence whereby you mentioned that there was no life. It already creates an eerie mood to the story. Try to include a clause here and there in order for your work to flow better.

Reply
Jake
26/1/2014 01:25:56 am

The old, grubby, shrieking shed had always laid in my back garden for several years. Every time I went outside to play it always seemed to get closer and closer to me. One day decided to face my fear of the ram shackled shed, as I lunged closer to the shed it started to change shape and turned into a giant alien mother ship, the door opened and inside stood a disgusting, mortifying, ugly creature. It slowly stepped down the aluminium stairs, I turned to run away but its tentacle reached out and grabbed my ankle and pulled me in.

Reply
Jake
26/1/2014 02:41:25 am

A fabulous effort Jake. I really like this short extract from your imaginative mind. The vocabulary used is very good and the fact that you have related the shed as the character's fear edging closer and closer to him/her. Try and add short sentences next time to build even further tension between the character and the monster.

Reply
Mr Turner
26/1/2014 02:50:11 am

The comment above was from me. I forgot to post a name.

Abby
26/1/2014 01:43:19 am

There's something about this shed that scares me. It's like it's been abandoned, it's ancient. As I approach the shed I become nervous, the closer I get the worse it seems. When I walk past, the feeling inside is utter fear. The shed is almost empty, all that's visible is a pair of worn out pink shoes. Sometimes when I attempt to walk past, the nerves get the better of me and I freeze. I try my best to overcome my worry but it fails every time. No one understands how creepy the shed can get especially on a night. PLEASE KNOCK IT DOWN !!!!

Reply
Mr Turner
26/1/2014 02:43:24 am

This is an interesting take on the image Abby. I like the fact that your character constantly fears the shed and what's inside of it. I like how the drama and tension is built within your writing. Keep it up!

Reply
Pippa
26/1/2014 01:53:52 am

Dirty old red shed you look so sad. With your peeling paint, you’re muddy windows and your dark green mould creeping across you. In your rotten windows spiders have made the perfect home. A snail has the perfect climbing frame! Lying on your windowsill a lost, forgotten pair of pink ballet pumps. In the reflection of your windows you can see a clean shiny house. Inside of you, a pair of ladders ready and waiting to leave the shelter you provide. Protected by your roof that has been rained on, the sun shone on and the snow has been and gone on!

Reply
Mr Turner
26/1/2014 02:47:58 am

Well done Pippa! I love how you have symbolized the shed as if it were a character. I love the imagery used especially with regards to the snail. I like how you have put a different spin on this story. Good effort.

Reply
Molly b
26/1/2014 03:15:50 am

A girl slowly walked up to the shed she saw her musky reflection in the dirty window . She saw a pair of pink shoes lying on the window sill she wondered who's are the shoes and why are they there? All of a sudden she saw the shadow creeping around in the dark, she rushed and hid in a bush and didn't move. Who was that person in the window and where did they come from? It might be her Dad teasing her, or was it a total stranger. She cried "hello, hello" but there was no reply.

Reply
Emily
27/1/2014 08:36:03 pm

Well done molly It is a very good story

Reply
Holly
26/1/2014 05:07:36 am

I stared at the old shed, I had been told to never enter it.The windows were filthy and the paint was coming off. Cobwebs covered the roof and spiders crawled up and down the walls. I reached out to the door handle but as soon as I touched it it sent a shiver down my spine. Sometimes I felt sorry for the shed it had stood there silently for so many years never to be entered again. In the window I could see the reflection off an abandoned house. I turned around and when I looked back the shed was gone...

Reply
isabelle
27/1/2014 04:23:15 am

good pece of writing holly!

Reply
isabelle
27/1/2014 04:24:23 am

good pece of writing holly

Reply
Abigail
26/1/2014 11:17:55 pm

I walked towards the door of the shed.I could see a shadow inside moving closer,It moved closer.My heart was pounding.I could see clearly it was a girl with brown hair and blue eyes.I raised my hand to wave at her she waved at the same time.I walked towards her and her to me.I wondered why would she be in the shed.I felt scared but eye to eye we were at the glass who is she? I laughed a sigh of relief it was only me,my reflection in the glass.

Reply
Lewis
27/1/2014 12:15:41 am

There was a rusty old ram shackled shed in the middle of nowhere. It was a dark night and the shed was very still like a model. There was this family coming to move in where the shed was. The family were very rich but they wanted to save some money for the furniture. They looked out of the back window and found the rusty old shed.

Reply
Romana
27/1/2014 02:49:25 am

I was lost. I was trying to find my way back home. Suddenly, I came across an old and worn out shack, crumbled with old age as it stood still in the middle of the freezing, biting air. In the dusty windows was a blurry reflection of a small back garden and a stone coloured house . You could see the porch doors which were slightly open. Had the house been burgled? Was it just the wind? Had someone just left? I started to feel scared and frightened and my whole body started shaking frantically. I didn’t want to stick around to find out!

Reply
Abbie
27/1/2014 03:21:57 am

I slowly walked up to the old abbandoned shed,i shivered with fear.The window was tattered and dusty all you could see was the reflection of the house in it.It was falling apart .i really wanted to know what was inside but i was to scared to open it.The door was pad locked and nobody had a key,nobody even knew who lived in the house.The shed was at the end of the garden and nobody hardly even went in the garden.Was there any thing or any body in the shed...

Reply
rachel
27/1/2014 03:36:04 am

The old creepy shed at the bottom of the garden stood out like a sore thumb. It was just sitting there silently every day, it never changed; the spiders’ webs on the glass; the moss on the walls and on the roof. When you looked at it there were spiders crawling creepily over the glass. The old pink shoes looked sad and had been sat there for ages. It was nice when we first got the shed but over the years we didn’t bother with it. The old screws began to fall out and little bits of glass had been smashed.

Reply
isabelle
27/1/2014 04:25:19 am

really good rachel

Reply
rachel
28/1/2014 01:51:29 am

thank you isabelle

josh
27/1/2014 04:19:14 am

The old shed at the bottom of my grandparents house, old and rugged with spiders and mould. My grandpa always said "the shed was haunted" i never believed him until that day i decided to take a look through the old dirty window with the old pink shoes. My heart was beating faster and faster..............

Reply
ellie
27/1/2014 04:19:15 am

The old scruffy shed looks damp and neglected.Through the dirty windows there are a pair of pink shoes,but who do they belong to?Inside there is nothing but cobwebs and broken garden equipment.The red paint is covered in green furry mold.I slowly opened up the door and it made a huge creaking sound.Its making me feel very scared.It feels as though someone or something is watching me and its so creepy.I strp inside and hear a rustling noise and I freeze with terror.I wonder what it could be?Aarrhh! theres a huge rat ..........

Reply
emily
27/1/2014 05:17:22 pm

It was an ordinary Wednesday lucy was the last person out of her lovely year five class room .Suddenly something happend.She was turning off the light and went to shut the door , it wasn' t her year five class room it was a Victorian class room. Every one was wearing smocked dresses, ringlets and lace up boots. It was very strange, but I guess that's what they wore in thee Victorian times. Lucy approached one of the girls, "where am I ," she asked. ," Escomb school ," The girl replied lUCY. AAD TRAVELLED BACK IN TIME. It wasn't a normal Wednesday after all.

Reply
Emily
27/1/2014 08:27:26 pm

Did it have to be about a shed

Reply
Zak
30/1/2014 03:05:48 pm

Yes

Reply
Zak
28/1/2014 02:55:09 pm

There is a rusty old shabby shack with a old brown unstable roof.And
In there is a bright pink slippers what had a bright pink and white
line going down.It had three windows in the rusty old shack.The three
windows they had lots and lots of dusty old cobwebs

Reply
Zak
28/1/2014 03:18:46 pm

As well as the cobwebs on top of rusty old and shabby roof
but all what you see in side is nothing at all.
All you can see is brownness in the shabby old shack

Reply

Your comment will be posted after it is approved.


Leave a Reply.

    WELCOME

    Welcome to our Year 5 Class Blog. Feel free to visit our page and leave a comment.

    Picture
    Picture
    Picture

    Archives

    May 2016
    April 2016
    March 2016
    February 2016
    January 2016
    December 2015
    November 2015
    October 2015
    September 2015
    July 2015
    June 2015
    May 2015
    March 2015
    February 2015
    January 2015
    December 2014
    November 2014
    October 2014
    September 2014
    July 2014
    June 2014
    May 2014
    April 2014
    March 2014
    February 2014
    January 2014

    Categories

    All

Proudly powered by Weebly